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Poetic Fire ... Serenity's Candle Dance
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Poetic Fire ... Serenity's Candle Dance |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Spark to wick flicker to flame light the night once again it came shadows fall flame's glow to entrance watch her flow Sen's candle dance In a secret garden summers humid mist poet and verse engage in poetic tryst gifted pen gifted eyes poetic pleas poetic reprise hear her song hear her cries sing her harmony sing softly a lullaby Wish on the stars Kiss the moon dance this dance for the night ends too soon Inspiration born her sweet poetic curse taste her rhyme inhale her verse by candle glow her muse on high read her words ... witness her fly Match to wick Spark to flame poetry is thy creed Serenity is thy name Janet Marie *winkiewinkie* me twin me loves ya **************** ~3 A.M.~ matchbox twenty from the cd: Yourself or Someone Like You She says it's cold outside, and she hands me my raincoat She's always worried about things like that. She says it's all gonna end, and it might as well be my fault And she only sleeps when it's raining, And she screams, and her voice is straining, She says baby, It's 3AM I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. She's got a little bit of something, God it's better than nothing And in her color portrait world she believes that she's got it all She swears the moon don't hang as quite as high as it used to. And she only sleeps when it's raining, And she screams, and her voice is straining, She says baby, It's 3AM I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. She believes that life is made up of all that you're used to And the clock on the wall, has been stuck at three for days She thinks that happiness is a mat that sits on her doorway And outside, it's stopped raining. Then she says baby, It's 3AM I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. It's 3AM I must be lonely, Oh When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
This is fantastic JM! Made me smile from ear to ear!  ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Wish on the stars Kiss the moon dance this dance for the night ends too soon Inspiration born her sweet poetic curse taste her rhyme inhale her verse by candle glow her muse on high read her words ... then see her fly Sweet Janny  All is beautiful but this my fav wonderful writing Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Janet Marie, Beautifully put together, impacting on each other. Well thought of. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Sweet...This was enjoyable to read...and I loved the way the first ran so smoothly...  With a little piece of tomorrow, You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye. Because today won't last forever, And the past will only make you cry. |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Janet, this is gorgeous. Spark to wick flicker to flame light the night once again it came shadows fall Perhaps the simplest lines, but I love the rhythm. ~ Beth |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautiful tribute to a friend that you love and of course she is worth every word anyway. Your muse writes within your heart and finds the pen so easily and so masterfully these days. See rehab does help!!!! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Such a sweet intricate verse for our Serenity. You've captured her well. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
JM, you could bottle this is so good! And a lovely tribute as well. Keth Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
This is awesome! No other word will do. Great flow, simply awesome work. deb |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I don't know what to say...I woke up feeling so blue...(not black and blue either...) This is a beautiful poem...it touches me so...I love you much m'twin...and of course, you know I've got the printer rolling...thank you Janet. Meeting you has been like a miracle. Hugs. (and I'm OKAY although, HE's looking a bit skittish this morn...) Love to you. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ This is incredible, I love how you do what you do. -SEA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jan~ this is beautiful! but then again all your work is LOL. I agree w/ ya too...Serenity does pen some lovely poems...hmmmm you two must be related  love ya, ~amy~ |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I don't know who this "Serenity" person is, but JM - you've done it with this one. A fine tribute to a (I guess...  ) fine lady (man?)  OK - Teasing aside - Knowing Ms. S'en as I do - I can definitely see the pertinance of that particular song. I know it's rare for me to come on in the middle of the night (the song fits me too...) and not find her there, ready to harass ... errr... talk to me. Hugs to both o' you! C |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--This is very touching and so beautifully done...You are such a poet!!!! Serenity is lucky to have you as a friend...me too. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this is very nice. i now have the urge to dance in the moonlight. jann elizabeth Don't take any wooden nickels When you sell your soul -the eels |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you all for coming and dancing these replies are very sweet... and say hey even got a line from the elusive Christopher. thanks ... yeah.. that song is so her ... and to me sweet Sen ... your welcome baby and may I say "DITTO".. cause you already just know ... and if this made ya smile then that is all the thanks I need ... *blowing kisses to the south me twin* love ya too ...muchly me |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
WOW!!! Where was my invitation??? I wanted to be there! GEESH! Nobody ever invites me for the good stuff  Serenity, can I come to your next candle dance? Tell them I'm an old flame Jan....this is a terrific piece. SPAM RULES! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
SS* Oooooo I love it!!!! When you are inspired like this you absolutely GLOW!!! None finer or more deserving in this than S'en...Me loves ya both..((hugs girlies))~ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
loved them both - but strangly I preferred the second - (I must be the weird one ~S~ ) |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
JM- oooooo...this one's pur-dee. i like the second stanza a lot, for the images and the parallel couplets. they're so cool! i've never been candle dancing, but it sounds very...magickal... the MB20 was also a nice touch. i am not sure of what meaning it holds for you two, but for me it was a song for me and my best friend and i still think of her when i hear it. a wonderful verse, as always. a flight of fancy and candle dancing. the words are magically prancy, and while Jan's dream is tribute to serenty's poetic entrancing i just can't seem to shake this vision a candle really dancing. I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates who said, "I drank what?" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Baby? It's 3 am I must be lonely... Glad this was here...grin...love ya babes... (okay, close enough anyway...my computer clock is "off" a bit too...) |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Simply sensational! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Fantastic capture of the serene one. This caught my eye as this evening she has me blowing the flames of candles south to send a hurricane back to sea |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*chuckle* It's true. I tried to teach her how to blow...  (she's gonna kill me now!) But really shar, it is a subtle thang...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
As if I'd forget this... wakawaka yayayayayayay  and I always found it odd that the infamous definition of "whistle" was put your lips together and blow...  hugging you |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Happy Birthday, twins...  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh how I miss all these moments in time, good thing for archives. |
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