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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Too much too many misunderstandings... rapid fire brain unruly to have walked and walked a pack on back wearing out my shoes of leaving and now the crime is that I stay and hold my ears against the drone to understand too little, late... and left bereft unatoned... I light another cigarette and wish I were alone... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
serenity, you are one tough cookie....and a hell of a poet! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ 'wearing out my shoes of leaving' Hey, little barefoot girl ! Love n' hugs ! Yep ! Balladeer's right ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tender softness as in the tears of a child wrapped in tortured givings of life's hardening of suede cracking beneath residules of heat blistering paths ... given much for the eye to occupy if gazed upon the case but the fortune of knowledge is the golden heart inside weeping for the knowledge of just one to see. *I see* my friend...* I truely see*. Wonderful write my target of angel dander. You reach and you touch in every word you penn. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very powerful words. Have been in that space also. catalinamoon |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Great poem!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Karen a big HUGz to ya! This is worse m'friend than my Hellacious day yesterday! "These boots were made for walking, and one of these days their gonna walk over you." Keep strong girl! Great writing! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wearing out my shoes of leaving and now the crime is that I stay and hold my ears against the drone to understand too little, late... and left bereft unatoned... I light another cigarette and wish I were alone... ================ well ya KNEW this one is like slapping me with a mirror..right.. and ya know its ok... cause I MUST like the pain..Im SOOOO damn good at it .. and ya know what baby...im tired of being alone ...even when they are here.. and YEAH... YOU KNOW.. you bleed with poetic grace baby... me loves ya ... later-mirror-poet-gator me |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this was a very touching poem and beautiful |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
My heartfelt gratitude goes out to all of you. I've obviously had a crappy night...but would like to thank you all for being "there"---where ever that might be. Also, while I would hope that no one can relate, if by chance you have read this and do, here is an interesting link for you: http://www.sourcemaine.com/gift/spousal.html Hope I did that right...smile...according to some, it would have been a first for today. Thanks again, you guys are great. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
went to the site and going back now to finish reading.....just came back to give you {{{{{{HUGS}}}}}} kissed with angel dander |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen--This poem IS the way you walk...and it is strong and stomps and has blisters, but it is true...it is you! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ POWERFUL!!  -SEA[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Ahh Serenity!!! Me too...it's past, but the feelings can still be plumbed... very well done...put on some tap shoes and dance out of there!!! Hugs, Pepper Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
well done Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Serenity, truth unbound in your words...a wealth to ponder in the brevity of this piece. Robert Joseph |
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