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The Eternal Ocean |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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The sun is sweet with lemon yellow squeezing each ray with hue as we walk hand in hand together sunshine draped with sapphire blue Our footprints in the pebbled sand may wash away with salty lotion but our love will survive in the breeze waltzing on the dance floor of the ocean We wear coral rings of lobster pink covered by soft sheets of white sands making love, a treasure in my bed I kiss the salt from your loving hands The sweetness of our love is our potion making love beneath coral reefs of the ocean A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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azure Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 52 |
What beautiful images you present, very calming and dreamlike. I love it. Azure "I put it down on paper and then the ghost does not ache so much" - Sandra Cisneros |
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rene Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 113 |
i can only echo azure's comments, your poem is almost like liquid, amazing |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you so much azure and rene..I appreciate you both peeking in tonight..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
a very calming short sonnet -lovely Vicky ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A beautiful sonnet Victoria. Very soothing, and calm. Well done. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very lovely verse from you!! I love the title and how it just fits so perfectly with what you have penned. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
very nicely done, Victoria... |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Victoria, Meanings from a million years of thoughts came onto your keyboard. The hands of past poets were guiding you. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Victoria~ this is so beautiful. I love the feel and the flow, very soft. -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Bill...Thank you so much my friend..glad you enjoyed.. Gentle spirit...Nice to hear from you..thank you for visiting.. Mark...Thank you Mark...I did have some difficulty with the title..im happy you enjoyed.. Balledeer...Thank you for reading...nice to hear from you... JD...Well i dont know about that but that is a lovely thought JD..thank you for reading.. Sea...Thank you..im so glad you peeked in tonight..Glad you enjoyed ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
The flow is lovely and so is the imagery. Nice picture you painted, Victoria. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Victoria! Denise |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Elizabeth and Denise..im so glad you like it..thank you for your kind comments.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Victoria, the tides alone are enchanting...the words you share with us here create an even greater desire to wallow in their sway. Robert Joseph |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Robert..i am glad you found it inviting..as long as you can swim its ok haa.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Read this and wanted to go scuba diving..very nice...James |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
ok but watch out for those sharks James..sounds like fun..i snorkled when i lived there but no scuba diving.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I could almost feel the sand between my toes, it seemed the feeling was just in between the words. What a great feeling, Victoria! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Such stunning lines here... The sun is sweet with lemon yellow squeezing each ray with hue as we walk hand in hand together sunshine draped with sapphire blue ~ Our footprints in the pebbled sand may wash away with salty lotion ~ making love, a treasure in my bed I kiss the salt from your loving hands ~ The sweetness of our love is our potion I know, I just recopied 90% of the poem, but Victoria, this is marvelous! Thank you for the beautiful sentiment. ~ Beth |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Irish Rose and Eizabeth for your sweet comments..and for peeking in this afternoon.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Victoria.... Oh....this made me want to go take a stroll along the water!!! Only, the water here is about 30degrees, so I'd better wear a wetsuit!! I loved this one.....so picturesque, and peaceful!!!  !!Follow your dream! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Yes you mentioned living in Alaska the other day..Ive never been there..well if you dont stroll along the river then at least ice skate along it..berrrrrrrr.. Thank you Sunny..glad you enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
nicely done, Victoria ... imagery, imagery, imagery ... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Add me to the list of accolades! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Victoria~ This is soo exquisite and wonderful imagery abounds....great read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very beautiful, I love you use of colors Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
M.A Miller.. Thank you very much for peeking in ..appreciate it. Eagle One...Hi Eagle One..nice of you to visit..btw I tried to sign your guestbook but I got an error..just thought you would like to know.. Tracie..Im so glad you enjoyed. thank you very much ...nice of you to sayElizabeth..Thank you for visiting and your nice comments.. A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Your imagery and flow were awesome in this piece...*sigh* such a lovely read this morning. I believe this is my favorite of yours to date~ |
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