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Open Poetry #10

Mistakes (A Speed Poem)

Klondike
New Member

since 2000-10-17

Posts 9

0 posted 2000-10-17 05:41 PM

Things happen though we don't know why,
Bad things and good things alike,
The bad things aren't meant to be dweled on,
Not like the good, for we must remember,
Remember them all, but not wish to change,
Because that can't be done, and that is not fun,
Not fun no way, not in this world of mine,
would I change something that I have done,
Because I did it before and never should of hid it,
Yes I did it back then, but wont do it again,
I make Mistakes that's who I am,
That wont Change but the Thing we must do,
Must, must, never make the same one by two.

(I wrote This poem faster than I could write it down.. I am Not sure how long it took me But It was Extremely fast, And the Structure is Lacking, I know. But I don't want to change any of it, to me it has special meaning, Like one single thought described. A minute thought. The only thing I changed is I added a Must)

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

1 posted 2000-10-17 06:01 PM

Hi Klondike,

I really liked your poem and the last two lines really stuck and I agree with you, though sometimes we do again and again

Welcome to Passions!

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

Klondike
New Member

since 2000-10-17

Posts 9

2 posted 2000-10-17 06:08 PM

Thanks Maree,

I think I'll fit right in here

I usually get Yelled at by my friends for reading my poems to them

This should be a Nice change.

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

3 posted 2000-10-20 03:29 AM

Klondike~
Great read...I liked

Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

4 posted 2000-10-20 06:27 AM

'You are only the sum of your experiences, so denying your past is denying who you truely are' . Nice writing, I enjoyed it, you've made a very good point and your structure is pretty good if you wrote it that quick . Thanks alot .
L.of.L. Tom .

Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

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