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azure
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 52


0 posted 2000-10-17 04:10 PM


I  exist no more for you, my love,
my once solitary god.

Somewhere between my horses and headaches
I shifted in a dream, became
an Alice wandering alone in your strange woods.

I lived no more to awaken the whole world,
was embraced by duty
and stifled by words -

I can't say how it happened.

Today,(bored), staring hard at my steaming reflection, I took my hands from the soapy water

Strode outside, smacked
into the heady perfumes of autumn,
stood in the rain at the gate.

Outside it
waits not only all
I was born for, the delicate work
of my unfinished life, and his -
but that vibrant, horrible tune
that can take me senseless into ecstasy, somehow
make me whole again,
the girl I used to be.


© Copyright 2000 azure - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
1 posted 2000-10-17 04:16 PM


Azure, I liked this, it's well thought out, and I can imagine it really happening. Sometimes we tend to forget that we only live our lives once. We should enjoy as much of it as we can.
Take care
                  Marsha
                    

And welcome to Passions, I can see you'll be right at home here.



[This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 10-17-2000).]

Corazon
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

2 posted 2000-10-17 05:15 PM


your work just screams from inside of you, thank you for sharing, I like this much
ThUnDeRkYsS
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
3 posted 2000-10-17 06:37 PM


This is a very unique form and style of writing you use babe.  I like it    This says so much about you and who you have become today, not that I know you all that well yet... but I can certainly see it.  Funny thing is, I pretty much had an idea of what some of your writing would be like and I was surprised to see how close it is.  Excellent work.

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



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