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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2000-10-17 08:03 AM


Here He Comes Again

What is sorrow doing on my doorstep once again?
I have no other choice but to allow him to step in
His old familiar ramblings are tales I know so well
Painful  recollections of events he likes to tell

What is sorrow doing in the verses that I pen?
I was so certain that his face would not show up again
And now he’s back to torment me, to wake me in the night
To lace my words with teardrops in the poetry I write

Why does sorrow cling to me, he’s not a friend of mine
But ventures back into my life again from time to time
I think this time he’ll hit me hard, but I’m prepared to fight
And not fall victim to his phantom in the dark of night

Sorrow comes intruding and expects to fill the whole
But he should know the depth already carved into my soul
There’s lots of space in sorrow’s well, the hollow’s deep and dark
I doubt this time if he will even reach the half-way mark

Elizabeth Santos

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Robert Joseph
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since 2000-10-07
Posts 491
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1 posted 2000-10-17 08:14 AM


There’s lots of space in sorrow’s well, the hollow’s deep and dark
I doubt this time if he will even reach the half-way mark


Elizabeth, I believe this is one of the most creative, and intriguing ways of describing the depths of one's sorrows or soul, that I've had the experience in reading. Most enjoyable!


Robert Joseph

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

2 posted 2000-10-17 08:21 AM


This is sadly-beautiful.....

There’s lots of space in sorrow’s well, the hollow’s deep and dark
I doubt this time if he will even reach the half-way mark..........yep thats the spirit!!
Loved  this Elizabeth  

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2000-10-17 08:27 AM


Elizabeth,
There is no sorrow in the way you write, excellent. Love Sy

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-10-17 11:35 AM


We're riding the same wavelengths Liz ... perfect depiction here, and amazing lines and phrasing. Beautifully written ...

Best wishes,
/Kit

Marsha
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since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
5 posted 2000-10-17 11:43 AM


Elizabeth, this is such a well and beutifully written piece. I like this one soooo much.
Take care
                 Marsha
                

Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
6 posted 2000-10-18 04:35 AM


I always enjoy reading your poems, but I think this one is one of my favorites...Very well put.  

With a little piece of tomorrow,
You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye.
Because today won't last forever,
And the past will only make you cry.

suthern
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
7 posted 2000-10-18 02:12 PM


A stunning description of an unwelcome visitor!
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
8 posted 2000-10-18 04:33 PM


Tell this phantom to leave...
and I will send you sunshine beams
to guide your way...




and know that my spirit
and my prayers
are with you and yours
today and always




Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

9 posted 2000-10-18 09:45 PM


Sorrow is certainly an unwelcome visitor. This is a very creative piece of writing, Elizabeth. Well done. HUGS

Denise

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
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10 posted 2000-10-18 10:09 PM


Sounds to me like you've got an excellent weapon against him, Liz...beautiful writing.
Gemini
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA
11 posted 2000-10-18 10:17 PM


Sorrow is definately an unwelcome guest and can do so much damage when one is not looking, a nice power play to only let it in half way, wonderful words here.
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