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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Something, aptly, "beautiful" silver lace, stars of glitter... scent of oil, egyptian musk-- and incense, acrid, sweet, but bitter... the touch of satin lips meet mine... intensity of eye, entwined. Feed the hunger, never filled-- decant, from chalice, slippery, chilled... Too late, I feel the glass stem break. Too late. I've shattered. I'm opaque. I have no instinct for the kill--- I loved you then, I love you still. Too late, too late... I hug my knees, rock to cadence-- no relief... I'll sleep until my last dream's done... to wake to drink the lust of sun. A proper prayer, upon my knees... to think that you might just like me... and show me,trust me, one page more... a sky of blue-- the sea of green horizon, distant, near the shore... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, I'm impressed once again this is a spectacular write and it's going in2 my library thread  Coco |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tomorrow's chapter of new to bring the wonders ... the smiles... the tender moments time of waltz. Dance to new songs as you reel taken by enchanted sirens of love resting on shoulders of guilted pain once on the right now residing on the left chanting the horrors of yesterday's pain. Wonderful write my friend....sort of low on angel dust but you shall be gifted with or without it. Lovely write |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Something, aptly, "beautiful" silver lace, stars of glitter... scent of oil, egyptian musk-- and incense, acrid, sweet, but bitter... the touch of satin lips meet mine... intensity of eye, entwined. ======================= Too late, I feel the glass stem break. Too late. I've shattered. I'm opaque. I have no instinct for the kill--- I loved you then, I love you still. Too late, too late... I hug my knees, rock to cadence-- no relief... I'll sleep until my last dream's done... to wake to drink the lust of sun. A proper prayer, upon my knees... to think that you might just like me... and show me,trust me, one page more... a sky of blue-- the sea of green horizon, distant, near the shore... ===================== oh me twin of heart... ya know I do so ADORE this one... every line ... I love it and it loves me...every word.. and damn baby... this one gives me SUCH poet envy ... I could roll around in this one completly... (well you know)  ya know--ya keep telling me its only about the poetry now.. and ya know .. IT SHOWS ... COMMITTED ... and to be COMMENDED... man.. I REALLY LOVE this poem ... me thinks me needs to wake up Lil Sis for a midnight poetry read... we will call the chickens in *winkiewinkie* later-me-holding up mirrors-poet-gator me loves ya me |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"and show me, trust me one page more". Very nice writing...James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Very nice read indeed sweets enjoyed! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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BirdeeB Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106USA |
wow, totally took my breath away, that was so pretty. BB |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SerenityChild~ 'Too late, I feel the glass stem break. Too late. I've shattered. I'm opaque.' What beauty in your anguish. Love ya' gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Want to say a quick thank you to all who replied, I thank you so much---I'm very flattered...Coco, I'm always thrilled to know that someone might actually read my poetry twice....I admit it---gives me little "love bumps"---lol...Janet...you me and sis gotta talk about these chickens....rofl...and Marge/Mom...it's okay, I'm okay...I think, "I'm a better being than I've ever been...." Life is good. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
serenity, What a marvellous poem, you sent my spine shivering. Remarkable. "I have no instinct for the kill--- I loved you then, I love you still". Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
serenity ... well structured and thoughtout piece ... very unique ... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you so much Daniel---hmmm...a shivering spine, eh? don't think I haven't heard that one before! LOL...and hugs, m'friend... Mark---I can't thank you enough for your kind and faithful replies...means much to me, you know that? |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
you have no instinct for the kill? The rumors are all wrong?  This is classic serenity....which means great in my book |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW!!! serenity wonderful piece, so well written. Lots of emotion in this and so beautiful to read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Serene One, You mesmerise me... and have me in complete and utter worship... what a greatly written poem... regards, sudhir |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Very nice!!!!!!!! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
YUM!delicious poem... this one's sensual! good goin' girl! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
tracie--thanks for reading...hugs to you Sudhir--I LOVE worship!!! (You're so good at this stuff, lol) Thank you, m'friend, I hope that all is well with you. vandana--thanks to you also, I appreciate it much... doreen--thanks for poppin' in...big wet smooches to you!!! rofl... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"I hug my knees, rock to cadence-- no relief..." I think all of us have done this at one time or another, I loved these lines. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
absolutly intense, i loved the whole poem, i haven't felt so connected since i left trinidad, i will be back to read more, kindly reheart angrybraids Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, an amazing piece. I'll sleep until my last dream's done... to wake to drink the lust of sun. A proper prayer, upon my knees... to think that you might just like me... and show me,trust me, one page more... great lines, great poem. Of course i'm partial to "love bumps". Parker |
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