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Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
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North Carolina

0 posted 2000-10-16 11:26 PM


Put these feelings on a shelf
Tuck them neatly with no self.
Hide away the emotions of pain
Not even mentioning your name.
Block the tears trying to form
not even one tear I mourn
Hidden deep inside no meaning
Yet I'm empty, no redeeming
Haunting memories stir my rage
still I'm locked inside this cage
In my sleep, no dreams to comfort
Only you I see
My heart can not pass you by
so I deeply take a sigh
and continue in my thoughts
without my heart, for that
I gave to you from the very start.



© Copyright 2000 Rose - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-10-16 11:32 PM


Yes it does feel empty when you give your heart away to share and then one day find yourself without the presence of it anymore.  So full of sadness, I send you hugs my friend and wish for the healing to be swift for you.
Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
2 posted 2000-10-17 06:22 AM


Rosebud,
I am deeply touched by this poem, your hurt is so evident. I stretch my arms to hold you and comfort you, just let me know when you want me to ease the pressure. You have to unlock that cage, fast.

"Haunting memories stir my rage
still I'm locked inside this cage"

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
3 posted 2000-10-17 07:40 AM


Rosebud~

*sighs*...the pain you are feeling is clearly evident in this poem. this was powerful and intense and very sad. i am very sorry for the pain you are going through at this moment. i hope that in time you find the strength to claim your heart back and move on with your life. until that time hang onto faith and keep your head to the sky. take care.

amy  

Rosebud1229
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4 posted 2000-10-17 10:10 PM


sometimes pain does hide deep within, and sometimes happiness shines throughout, I cannot really explain, but I appreciate that you can relate and thank you for caring, sometimes my poetry brings out more of me than I really know myself.
SEA
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with you
5 posted 2000-10-17 11:37 PM


RB1229~ this is so very sad...I HAVE to cry and scream and rage and get my feelings out...I think I'd pop if I didn't   Still, I understood this very well. Great poem   -SEA
Rosebud1229
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6 posted 2000-10-17 11:43 PM


Sea, I do all of that and more!! But sometimes the battle gets tough and then I concede to fight no more.
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2000-10-18 05:47 PM


Rosebud makes me think about how easy it is for us to give our heart away...at least for me...and so hard to take it back...
James

Marsha
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8 posted 2000-10-18 06:01 PM


I think this is amazing it's so full of feelings, so full of pain. A very well written poem, Hugs to you and I hope that when this time is over, for it will be one day, that you can be whole again. Until then lean on us your friends, we're here for you, I promise.
Take care
                  Marsha
              

jonmcm
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since 2000-10-11
Posts 222
England
9 posted 2000-10-18 07:24 PM


Hi Rosebud,

You reveal a lot in this poem of your heart, and our instinct to try and deny how we truely emotionally feel-

'Block the tears trying to form
not even one tear I mourn'

Yet, you have mourned, and I hope you find healing in those tears, and find someone who will treasure the heart you so freely give.

Jon


jonmcm
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since 2000-10-11
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England
10 posted 2000-10-18 07:24 PM


Hi Rosebud,

You reveal a lot in this poem of your heart, and our instinct to try and deny how we truely emotionally feel-

'Block the tears trying to form
not even one tear I mourn'

Yet, you have mourned, and I hope you find healing in those tears, and find someone who will treasure the heart you so freely give.

Jon


Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
11 posted 2000-10-19 10:10 PM


thanks Jmlee, we are alot alike, I to am one of those people that dive in so completely, sometimes I think I look for more than I should, and other times not enough, but My whole heart goes either way,
Marsha thanks so much for the hug, sometimes my feelings are overbearing wish I could hide them away, but they tend to come out I appreciate your hug alot!
Jon, I guess sometimes my mourning comes from not understanding and your right sometimes I mourn not wanting to but it still happens.

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
12 posted 2000-10-19 10:17 PM


Written with the ink of your tears...this
touched my heart, excellent writing~

Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
13 posted 2000-10-19 11:30 PM


glad you liked it butterfly, the heart is definetely open even when we try it's no use.
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