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Through Tide and Time
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Through Tide and Time |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Across the sky seeped in red, Lies a golden sun where it has set, And where the clouds hang almost dead, Scores with white chalk as passing jet, Along the horizon meets the sea, Gentle ripples rippling passed, Salty spray does bask rocks knee, Upon the dusty shores I'm here last, And the moon becomes all to clear, Iluminating all the stars though black, A cresent shape hangs agaisnt and leers, And Shooting star passes, leaving track, Palm trees sway in midnight breeze, Wind will whispher and gently whine, Dusting off sand the wind doth tease, Will prevail through tide and time. Sometimes you have to let go and move on, But never let go of the memories. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Maria~ "And the moon becomes all to clear, Iluminating all the stars though black, A cresent shape hangs agaisnt and leers, And Shooting star passes, leaving track, Palm trees sway in midnight breeze, Wind will whispher and gently whine, Dusting off sand the wind doth tease, Will prevail through tide and time" Stunning!! You got some very beautiful lines in here...and the rhythm of it all is very soothing. vivid images that paint the "picture" well. good job. i'll be looking for more from you.  Take care. Amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Ahhh, beautiful visuals and descriptions, Maria. A pretty picture indeed! ...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -me, Song of Gesture |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Maria, Oh yes the shoreline this is such a pretty rhyme and splendid imagery... Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful imagery, Maria! Very lovely! Denise |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Love it Maria..beautiful.. nice images~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Maria, Keep writing such wonder, it brings back many memories. Loved it Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You know, I saw the ocean for the first time last spring and it still leaves me with an awe thinking about it and the sound and the feel of it. I loved this one. Kathleen |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Will prevail through tide and time. I _love_ this line. The entire piece sent me shivering with images. Fabulous, Maria. ~ Beth |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Actully I think I got a bit carried away with this. But I would like to thank you all for your thoughts Sometimes you have to let go and move on, But never let go of the memories. |
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