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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-10-15 03:49 PM


Human spirit, they say, is strong and stupendous,
And if it desires, the soul of a person
Could break through sinew and tendons,
With no intention of changing its course. Then,
Our bodies would crumble like deserted asylums,
Taking down everything within their vicinity
Into deep waters, where the sound of violins
Will hit the casualties with the speed of infinity.
Gods sank the Titanic as a metaphor and an omen,
For what might occur if we get too powerful.
But I feel,-- soon, my soul will dive from the oven
And I’ll plunge, with a hissing, gulping a mouthful
Of the life blood, -- of love and poetry,
Of her perfume, and other perplexities...
Overwhelmed, I’ll hit bottom and urgently,
I will write once again of my Exodus.

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Check out my poetry here:

http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet






[This message has been edited by Master (edited 10-15-2000).]

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Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2000-10-15 04:15 PM


Master,
you certainly show mastery over words in this dark piece. Well done!

Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Master
Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
2 posted 2000-10-15 07:48 PM


Thank you Kethry, I'm glad you liked it!

Check out my poetry here:


http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet



Master
Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
3 posted 2000-10-16 12:00 PM


I've changed it a bit, hope it sounds better.

Check out my poetry here:


http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet



Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

4 posted 2000-10-16 01:11 AM


wow!

Kathleen



Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods
5 posted 2000-10-16 04:16 AM


Master, do you have homepage with poetry displayed? I'd love to get my hands on it.
I don't think I could spill out everything I think about this in a simple post... maybe later I'll come back and edit this statement.
Until then, PLEASE, keep your subjects erratic... Superb.

~ Beth

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 10-16-2000).]

Master
Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
6 posted 2000-10-17 11:51 PM


Thank you for responding, I do have a homepage, the signature below this message has the url. Glad you liked it!

Check out my poetry here:


http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet



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