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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Across the Stones I crossed over into your world, my intentions on having you speak the same language as my own. You were caved in, set apart from what was natural, a traveler in a space of time, no one but you seemed to comprehend. My hands warmed the chill of your loathing, as your tears brought the frost of the past to bear witness in the places of my mind where light seemed never to travel, and darkness a wall covered in moss. I learned your fears, I felt the sting of your denial, and in my haste I pressed you to a place you cared not to partake of. So now I stand at your arms length, yet your hand grips my heart, holding me in the place you feel most at ease. I dare not step away, my heart unable to survive without you. Unfolding each thought I retrace each step to know without doubt the execution of my arrival, as I know one day we shall step across those same stones, and into the world where we speak one language. © Robert Joseph ~enb~ [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 10-14-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well done, Robert! You are a very talented writer! Denise |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Robert Joseph, This is the second writing of yours I have read, and must say I am duly impressed. Keep them coming! Bill |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So now I stand at your arms length, yet your hand grips my heart, holding me in the place you feel most at ease. I dare not step away, my heart unable to survive without you. Unfolding each thought I retrace each step to know without doubt the execution of my arrival, as I know one day we shall step across those same stones, and into the world where we speak one language. ===================== this is very well written... very powerfully expressed... you have made the reader feel the need... the desperation to be let in by this person excellent work excellent read take care jm |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RJ~ Such depth to this writing - I certainly enjoyed the read. 'your tears brought the frost of the past to bear witness in the places of my mind where light seemed never to travel' Tenderly powerful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert Joseph--Yes, you are a talented writer..so many wonderful phrases in this painting with perfect ease your feelings...very well done! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Lovely Robert, written from the heart..very tender and sincere..enjoyed very much..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
RJ---sorry I'm late....but I'm so glad I popped in...this is just remarkable. very eloquent! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You were caved in, set apart from what was natural, a traveler in a space of time, no one but you seemed to comprehend. My hands warmed the chill of your loathing, as your tears brought the frost of the past to bear witness in the places of my mind where light seemed never to travel, and darkness a wall covered in moss. I learned your fears, I felt the sting of your denial, and in my haste I pressed you to a place you cared not to partake of. So now I stand at your arms length, yet your hand grips my heart, holding me in the place you feel most at ease. Your talent is so amazing and I am so glad that you joined us here....superb penning. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Denise, Bill, Janet, Marge, Martie, Victoria, serenity, and Mark... Thank you so much, I'm pleased to know each one of you found something to enjoy in this piece. Robert Joseph |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
A soft hushed wow. I don't give out wow's that often... lol This is completely satpscyh...(if you want to know the full concept of this please check out the English Forum's thread on Overused words Robert, lol) Like Martie, you have a way of threading your words together that makes your work complete, full. I very much admire your writing. K The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
K, thanks so much, your enthusiasm and recognition of my writing is fondly received. Robert Joseph |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
RJ~ I wish I could write like this. Powerful and emotional. This is amazing. -SEA |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
So now I stand at your arms length, yet your hand grips my heart, holding me in the place you feel most at ease. We all do have a tendency to do this, dont we? Hold someone at a distance in order to protect ourselves. I dared not step away, as my heart would be unable to survive without you. Gotta love a strong man who knows what and who he wants. beautiful as always Robert. Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a strong piece. I feel inadequate to reply and yet, I have to say, it's stunning. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
SEA, Thanks so much. Your generous response is a welcome sight. Nice to know you enjoyed this piece. Robert Joseph (AWC)Annie, Thanks for reading and responding, your insightful comments are most appreciated. Robert Joseph Kathleen, Thanks so much for taking the time to respond. Your thoughtful response is greatly appreciated. Robert Joseph |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Robert~ This is very good. Interesting write, and very heartfelt words. Deb |
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