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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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a presence seeming, eyes that stare, a feeling something else is there... the simple spark of soft aware... a ghost of hand, ghost of care... simply every every thing a gift a voice a rhyme that sings... a flutter of a thing with wings-- a Presence-- once, where none was there. |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Serenity, what is your subject! I have many guesses, all very fitting. Reminds me of when I was just past being a child and left alone in our large, old farmhouse  . Nice job.~ Beth |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Serenity~ This is so beautiful, a lovely reminder of my nan's presence the night of her funeral, I was alone and thinking of her when I felt her hand on mine...sounds weird I know but it did happen. Thanks for the remembrance Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ec--I thank you much... and tracie, I thank you much as well. Was going to tell ya'll what I had intended, but...I think I'll leave it for each person to interpret the Presence for themselves...smiles, hugs, and thanks |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful style you have Serenity. This flowed so perfectly ... just loved it! And yes, keep us guessing on the "Presence", it can mean so many different things to each different reader, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
serenity--- You ROCK, girl!!!this is soooooo lovely..... you're a fine writer, y'know that? ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ahhh my friend!!! Will you be my gaurdian angel???? Such a lovely piece from you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a feeling something else is there... the simple spark of soft aware... a ghost of hand, ghost of care... simply every every thing ================= yep... know this well ... and you wrote perfectly captured it like the whipsered sweet secret that it tis ... and i find that same comfort in your poetrys presence... and in your friendship as well.. love ya me twin of heart me |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I not only enjoyed your poem, but I really enjoyed your replies!! I agree with you...that the subject can be interpreted individually!! Yes.....that's what I love about all of your work.....there's a certain freedom that gives the reader a personal view. You have a fantastic style, my friend!!  Follow your dream! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Popping in quickly to say thanks to all, forgive my haste...but thanks to the forum, you YOUR "Presence"!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and thanks to you my friend. . . for your presence. . . excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
hi sen, sneaking in for a quick read on a friends puter,i'm not on line no more but wanted to read one of yours this is a comforting, calming poem makes me think of guardian angels and soulmates sis has been reading me some of your poems on the phone and i'm printing some of them out to take home your work is awesome peace and poetry lil sis my sister is the poet I am but a shadow. by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ooooooo S'en I love this one...it floats and sighs all over the page. Soft and gentle yet with the current of strength running through it. Wow...only you could combine all these things into one Awesome poem! Love ya~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Would like to say thanks to all, Holly, and Sven----and everyone else that I have forgotten "gotten by"... but my most especial thanks to "lil sis"---I hope someday you'll know how you have touched my heart. Hands down, no doubt, yours is the best reply I've ever received. Serenity bows, eyes closed, hand over heart....thank you much luvie.... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wooohooo you GO girl! Love it hon, wonderful writing "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Serenity~ this is breataking! i believe you speak of angels with whispering wings...but that is just my interpretation. i feel blessed to be able to read the "presence" of your work. it left a calm effect on me. thanks much for posting this. take care. amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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