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Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods

0 posted 2000-10-14 12:15 PM


Rain swam through afternoon
to the night of her hair: slick raven flutter
as the brown happy feet (with beautiful curling toes)
stamped out the aim of steps into dancing's clutter

flight, flow the seesaw sway of her visible croon
she is prancing the abandon of summer’s waning rich alchemy…
charms resting on her arching fingertips
I flay my aura-tongue in the rain to drink of her violent beauty

This is divinity tasted, the sweet disturbance of a Tuesday...
Upon the strange, impulsive monsoons of suburban Colorado
this gift assails … startling the rainstorm to brilliance
she ravages the air and luster falls

Scarves promenade her neck in halo:
  the delirious smear of kaleidoscopes
Go Go frantic goddess!
You are the sweet pink apparatus of my water vision
& the orgiastic language screaming from my sleepy tongue

Tiny hand, slick with rainwater, encumbers tangibles with a twitch
Splendor spills ‘neath raw soles over the sidewalk; footsteps paw concrete angelic
The wind about her whines, dog begging at her heel
SMASH! her hands applaud the measure
And lightening answers, scraping its nails through the air

Shaking honey from her shoulders,
Gargantuan breasts bobandducking in brutal quivers,
Thick waist tumult in sanguine rags,
she shakes, shakes in her skin
spreads her lips broad over her chancy teeth,
their terrible white peeled naked underneath

You spin your neck to watch her whirlwind unwind secrets --
I catch you; lips open in wish-wonder doubt --
and her invisible sexuality, caught in the camouflage of age.
Do her hips glaze a sweet taste in your mouth?

I watch too: zephyr hollowing spaces through lacy arms in pirouette
(as the bracelets shook, shook with trumpet thunder)
I scream, amazed, with the clouds pounding out her noise
frenzy serenade for the glowing gypsy fire in the storm



© Copyright 2000 Megs - All Rights Reserved
Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
1 posted 2000-10-14 12:21 PM


An interesting picture you created...and very well created it was!!  Very nice!!

Welcome to Passions!!!

Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
2 posted 2000-10-14 12:25 PM


Thank you, Bridgette for the Welcome and your kind reply    !

~beth

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-10-14 12:26 PM


ElizabethCor~
Welcome to Passions.
You will enjoy your stay among friends.

Your write was alive with the grace of gypsies dancing.
Quite a unique render.

'Upon the strange, impulsive monsoons of suburban Colorado
this gift assails … startling the rainstorm to brilliance
she ravages the air and luster falls'


Enjoyed.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
4 posted 2000-10-14 12:36 PM


Thank you, Marge. I have so enjoyed the few posts I have already seen from you -- it's wonderful to gain back a reply! I am delighted that you liked it... thank you for taking the time to re-post a few favorite lines.

~ beth

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-10-14 12:36 PM


Hello and Welcome new poet..
you make a wonderful entrance with this
excellent poem..
creative, imaginative
great imagery
I look forward to more of your work
take care
JM

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
6 posted 2000-10-14 12:39 PM


Thank you, Janet! What a warm welcome I have already received! May I offer my appreciation for your high regards and for taking the time to read. I look forward to posting many more...
Victoria
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7 posted 2000-10-14 12:50 PM


Welcome Elizabeth, i just noticed it is your first post..i too welcome you to passions..and hope you like it as much as i do.. ....enjoyed your poem very much..

                     ~Victoria~

          


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
8 posted 2000-10-14 12:55 PM


(opps douple post!)  

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Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
9 posted 2000-10-14 12:55 PM


Victoria, thank you for your welcome. I am so glad everyone has enjoyed this verse.

p.s. I love the quote in your signature!< !signature-->

There will be time, there will be time To prepare a face to meet the faces that you meet;
There will be time to murder and create, And time for all the the works and days of hands That lift and drop a question on your plate

~ Beth


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Daniel J D
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Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
10 posted 2000-10-14 01:27 AM


Beth* Welcome to Passions. Wow, what a poem to begin with. Look forward to more

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
11 posted 2000-10-14 02:08 AM


Thank you, Daniel! I look forward to staying  
... a question to the "regulars" or moderators: Is there a way to attach your picture to your username ( i.e., the small place at the side where it is listed), or is this a privilege only for moderators, Sr. members etc.? Just curious...  If not, I would be interested in attaching a small photo to my posts if someone could explain how? Thanks!

~ Beth

dgvarner
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High Springs, Florida
12 posted 2000-10-14 02:39 AM


beth..big welcome to you..very nice poetry  

yes, you can put your picture in there..
go to members area and upload your picture in the correct place  

hugs, dg


she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without
-clint black

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
13 posted 2000-10-14 02:48 AM


Gosh, I'm so sorry, I think there's something wrong with my web browser... I keep making double posts.

~ Beth


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Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
14 posted 2000-10-14 02:49 AM


DG, Oh, thank you! I'll do that now   I graciously accept your welcome and sweet comment. Sheesh, I even get a hug ~blushes~.

~ Beth

Robert Joseph
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South Carolina
15 posted 2000-10-14 07:01 AM


Hi Beth, invigorating, creative, and mysterious, are but a sample of the adjectives that come to mind as I'm caught up in the swirl of your words. Thoroughly enjoyed!

Robert Joseph

Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
16 posted 2000-10-14 08:47 AM


What a pretty name you have! (hehe)
Another Elizabeth, that makes 4 of us, I think, including Lizzie. That's why I use Liz, it's easier to type, but I prefer Elizabeth
Welcome to passions!
An interesing first post full of images
Will look forward to many more fine poems
Liz

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
17 posted 2000-10-14 08:59 AM


Welcome to Passions!!!!  This one has such wonderful imagination and the penning was superb...an excellent entrance to our home.
doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
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Virginia
18 posted 2000-10-14 02:21 PM


I can't tell you how pleased I am to see this caliber of poetry on these forums... Again, you have blown me away with your writing and I can't wait to read more. Your imagery, use of language, the way you paint a picture with your words, the emotions behind it.... all of it... this is top shelf writing and I am pleased to meet you. Thank you for an excellent read.  

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~


Nan
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19 posted 2000-10-14 02:55 PM


Fine work, indeed - Your paradelle is equally as impressive - Do allow me to extend a formal welcome to Passions - This is a pretty superb place to hang your castanets.

Check your email for a special greeting..

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
20 posted 2000-10-14 05:25 PM


A desirable and fulfilling read...James
Sven
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21 posted 2000-10-14 08:04 PM


Wonderful. . . I could see the picture that you painted. . .

Welcome my friend. . .  

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Irish Rose
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22 posted 2000-10-15 11:05 AM


Welcome to Passions.  This is a wonderful introductory poem. Hope to read more.


Kathleen



Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
23 posted 2000-10-15 12:13 PM


Elizabeth,
You use a full palette. Enjoyed and welcome

Kethry
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Victoria Australia
24 posted 2000-10-15 04:50 PM


Elizabeth,
wonderful first post. Welcome to passions.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Martie
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25 posted 2000-10-15 07:15 PM


Elizabeth--this is incredible poetry...truly enjoyed!!  Welcome to Passions!
Balladeer
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26 posted 2000-10-15 08:22 PM


You are truly gifted in your ability to grasp the reader's attention with you exhilarating style...an enormous welcome to you, miss...
Elizabeth Cor
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Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods
27 posted 2000-10-15 10:07 PM


WOW! You have overwhelemed me with your generosity in welcomes and adulation. THANK YOU, all of you.
I have so enjoyed reading the other poems posted, and to have such a reply to my own... I cannot explain my gratitude. Perhaps I'm a bit of a fool, but I'm just sitting here tingling   . What a wonderful, wonderful place.
I look forward to getting to know each of you and your personal writing styles. May I say that I am honored to be able to belong to such a warm place filled with such enthusiastic, talented people.

My most gracious regards,
Beth

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Poertree
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28 posted 2000-10-20 05:32 PM


humm... hi elizabeth ...just want to echo doreen's sentiment ... also ..there is a little forum called CA (critical analysis) if you happen to be interested - ho hum ..

now i'm gonna get told off for advertising again  

philip

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29 posted 2000-10-23 09:55 AM


Well, I've decided to got hru all your oems that I've missed.  This after reading one of your writings.  I guess you have a lot of fans in here.

What can I say?  I feel like I have to carry a dictionary when I read your work.  You grasp of the English vocabulary is astounding.  Is it the Elizabeth's? Is it the name?  Cause I swear that another one can write too,  E. Barrett Browning?  It must be the name  

You mind if a print your poems?


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Elizabeth Cor
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since 2000-10-13
Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods
30 posted 2000-10-23 06:04 PM


Okay, philip... THIS one is in your office as well.

Acire, if it makes you feel any better, I use a dictionary while writing it   ...
And I don't mind if you print my poems as long as you're doing so under legal conditions (I'm not sure what illegal activity you could actually contribute to by printing a poem... but it doesn't hurt to be safe). Thank you for reading, and be careful   !

~ Beth< !signature-->

I hate quotations. Tell me what you know.




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Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
31 posted 2000-10-23 07:19 PM


"... And lightning answers, scraping its nails through the air ..."

Well OK, the entire poem was a feast; but this image was a rare delicacy ...

Your talent is astounding.

--L


Never underestimate the power of stupid people in large numbers.

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