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Can You See Her?
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Can You See Her? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Can you see her? This woman who hides her pain. Can you see her? Here beneath these smiling lips Look closer and you'll find A tear stained cheek a trembling lip And a heart torn with grief Shattered dreams and love betrayed Confusion and pain her late night companions Now he's not there to talk to And why? Thats all she wants to know. Why say I love you when you knew You knew your heart lay elsewhere In anothers arms in anothers eyes Yet you said... ...I love you And you wonder at her pain Can you see her? Do you see this woman The one you betrayed with your lies? Can you see her? [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
A liar only thinks of themselves..not of the others persons feelings..most of the time they are just cold blooded..jmho..  nicely written..~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This broke my heart to read. You did an excellent job of portraying the emotions and the feelings that would definitely be prevalant in a time like this. Good work. Kathleen |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This broke my heart to read. You did an excellent job of portraying the emotions and the feelings that would definitely be prevalant in a time like this. Good work. < !signature--> (oops, sorry guess I'm repeating myself! My keys are sticking!!) Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
The shrill cords of a broken heart...the scorn of deception...effective writing, nicely done, Paula. Robert Joseph |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Paula- wow...such pain and sorrow in this one...tugs at my heart. wonderfully written, my friend. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh, my twin..... I feel the deep hurt in this, as I know it hurt to write it. My thoughts and love are with you......  Follow your dream! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes Paula I can see you...and I feel sadness for your heart....betrayal can be like taking poison...James |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paula~ I see.....and you made me see clearly the pain inside along with the anger from the hurt and lies.....Excellent write sweet lady. -SEA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ The lies come easily for some - the pain hard to get beyond for those who are wounded by them. You have heart and it will weather this and find a truthful love. *Hugs*, hon ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
ooee Paula, if this is you, stop beating yourself up, you've done nothing wrong. This cuts deep. ((Hugs)) Good writing. Marcy |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Paula, Liars are the world's parasites to humans. They prey on people and inflict wounds so terrible, they are often responsible for the breakdown of society. We do not need them. So sorry to see the hurt. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Victoria...well your opinion is very welcome here...thanks Irish Rose...lol I dont mind the double post...and thank you Vicky...lies tend to break your heart...thank you Sunny...yeah you do know and your support has meant so very much to me...love ya twin James...yes but friends like you are the antidote...luv ya Sea...oh yeah lots of anger...but I realize he isnt worth the effort Lady Marge...you faith and support are most appreciated...thank you dear lady Marcy...yes me...and yes I know...but sometimes unanswered questions are as bad as the lies...thanks Daniel...its a wound that has healed Daniel and I have grown because of it |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
The scars and memories are always with us, but the pain fades in time.....take care! |
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