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BloomingRose
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0 posted 2000-10-13 12:13 PM


~A Rose~


Crimson red on white satin
a soft scent of perfume
upon my pillow

a single rose...

It beckons me stay
a promise to hold
as quietly I lay

Lazy eyes open
turning my head I look out my window
twinkling stars I see
as the moon knowingly
winks back at me

A love song drifts across the room
filling my senses with visions of you
petals of red touch skin
the scent of a full bloom
fills the room

My pillow beckons
me to sleep once more
as I wait to hear
your key turn in the door...

BloomingRose


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1 posted 2000-10-13 12:26 PM


BloomingRose~
Oh, my !
This is just lovely, lovely, lovely ! ! !
A fitting tribute to the beauty of the rose
of romantic notions.
~*Marge*~


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BloomingRose
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2 posted 2000-10-13 12:46 PM


Marge,
Thank you..I always welcome your comments.
Deb  

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-10-13 01:50 PM




Crimson roseof promise
resting in the white of pillow
Dreams of tomorrows walks
and slumbers
under lover's willow


A very lovely verse from you my friend and when I say lovely I mean in heart, promise, visions, and poetic beauty.  One of your best to date and that is saying something as you have penned many beautiful pieces.    





[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 10-13-2000).]

BloomingRose
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4 posted 2000-10-13 05:20 PM


Mark,
Glad you liked this one. A much appreciated compliment, coming from someone as gifted as you.

Deb

EagleOne
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5 posted 2000-10-13 06:34 PM


This is beautiful work, the word dreamlike comes to mind. Love the last verse!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2000-10-13 11:48 PM


Crimson red on white satin
a soft scent of perfume
upon my pillow

a single rose...

It beckons me stay
a promise to hold
as quietly I lay

=====================
Deb, this is lovely writing...
you have captured the sweet anticipation well
romantic and softly expressed
very nice work
take care
jm

BloomingRose
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7 posted 2000-10-13 11:56 PM


EagleOne~ Thank you much  

Janet~ Thank you for reading  

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