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lucky
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0 posted 2000-10-13 03:39 AM


I always knew the...

As the rains
drift through a cloudy day
showering thoughts with emotions
discovering songs and conventional
idioms of nought sure why dance
through the shadows of
darkness graceful
wild and see what
could possibly go wrong

you’ve been consorted you’ve got to
play along I’m sure you noticed motion
into notions of worthless pain taking
you in her arms away but then
again words expand
to the growing
perceptions
loss of feeling

to imperfections I never
knew exactly who you were
but I always knew the
rain.

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Writing isn't just something I do... it's something I am...
To write of feelings that touch all hearts
in some manner is my greatest delight...
[Marge Tindal]




[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 10-13-2000).]

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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2000-10-13 09:22 AM


"I never knew exactly who you were
but I always knew the rain."........that did it for me........   -SEA

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
2 posted 2000-10-13 12:20 PM


Lucky~
What beautiful thoughts are yours.
You display such elegance with your poetry.

You've got a pretty neat signature there too !  
Wipe this honored smile off my face !
I love your thoughtfulness as it represents
the you I've come to know.
I love your friendship AND your poetry !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Paula Finn
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missouri
3 posted 2000-10-13 12:32 PM


This just aches...I always knew the rain...do i ever know that feeling
lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
4 posted 2000-10-13 02:02 PM


Sea,

thank you so much.

Marge,

I guess I can cheer... thanks for the smile.

Paula,

I guess sometimes I can write em...

thanks all, dale


Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2000-10-13 02:54 PM


to imperfections I never
knew exactly who you were
but I always knew the
rain.

All i can say to this is WOW...the pain is very vivid.  Wonderful penning.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-10-13 03:02 PM


This poem has a very sweet fragrance to it...James
lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
7 posted 2000-10-13 07:14 PM


James,

thanks for the kind words... much appreciated.

dale

Writing isn't just something I do... it's something I am...
To write of feelings that touch all hearts
in some manner is my greatest delight... ~"Ma

lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
8 posted 2000-10-13 10:04 PM


Mark I didn't forget you... it must be a memory thing... thanks my friend.

dale



Writing,
isn't just something I do...
it's something I am... To write of feelings
that touch all hearts in some manner is
my greatest delight...

Elizabeth Cor
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since 2000-10-13
Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods
9 posted 2000-10-13 11:40 PM


This is aesthetically pleasing as well as a lingual joy. A very nice form of free verse, lucky.
Temptress
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Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
10 posted 2000-10-13 11:55 PM


Beautiful...and yes..elegant. I never really knew how to describe your work.  I loved the ending too!  

lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
11 posted 2000-10-14 12:20 PM


Elizabeth,
A lingual joy, huh... I like that...

Temptress, don't give me that..! you know how to discribe things just fine. Maybe better than that come to think of it..!



Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am.
To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight.
-Marge Tindal

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