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Upon Finding Purpose |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
** my first real attempt at free verse ... a special thank you to Martie ... whos amazing gift of writing in this style inspires me to wish to attempt it. I hope to someday write it with the grace ... that her and the other gifted poets who master this form do so very well. Miles to go before I sleep ... I know ... but that is the gift of inspiration when found in anothers talents =================== ~Upon Finding Purpose~ I saw him standing there at the fray, in the gray edges just outside the shadows. From the first moment I laid eyes on him ... I knew he was special ... gifted ... wounded. There was a certain frailty about him, as if someone would speak too loudly ... he would slip back into the darkness. And then there were those eyes ... all knowing, piercing, jaded, emerald sparks. He could look right thru you ... or see behind your deepest, hidden layer. You could not witness him ... and not witness his light ... his glow. And I ... like they ... was drawn to the flame. Some came closer out of fear of the unknown, some in curiosity, some out of fascination. I was drawn out of need, need of things I didn't even yet understand, of things I had yet to discover with in myself. There were no awkward first moments, there was an immediate connection ... conduit, magnetism, absorption. He was the silver, etched, moon that pulled all my tides, he was the whispered changing of my seasons. For a too few precious months ... all my orange-glow suns -- rose and set in him. He was a poet, prophet, an empyrean, he was innocence taken too soon. A scarred child, a wounded dove, he was a lesson in forgiveness. In patience, understanding, acceptance ... most of all in the trust found in unconditional love. To this day I'm not sure if I found him, or he found me ... yet I know fate found us. Once he touched down, he landed in my heart ... quietly slipped inside my soul. Both of which were aching with unrequitedness ... of vacancy ... from then on nothing was ever the same ... nor will ever be again. For within those moments infinite, he flowed thru me and looked out thru my eyes ... granting me vision, clarity, perspective. No one had ever needed me like that before, Until then I never knew ... I needed someone ... to need me ... like that. By him ... of him ... with him ... I now had reason. He gave me purpose ... then he gave me back poetry. He left on the same echo of light that delivered him, on the eve of the new millennium ... when all was renewed and reborn in hope. And in that dance of anticipation, he was at last carried home. Finally free of the past that often owned him. He took a part of me with him, but more so, he left a part of him with me. So I no longer look for reasons, for it was in his grace that I found purpose. With every word I write ... his light burns brighter. He is anticipation everlasting ... he is every verse to be written. The rhythm, the reason I rhyme, He is my poetic justice ... he is inspiration ... on high. He is poetry ... my reason, my purpose. Janet Marie ************ "when you walked into the room...I saw their faces ... did you know ... you made it seem like time was standing still ... and I felt ... fascination ... though I knew you then ... just casually ... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction ... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger ************** for DeVante' ... for all the gifts of our time, for encouraging me to start writing again ... I will never again allow my voice in poetry to be lost from me ... every word I write ... is because of you. you are my love ... my light ... always ... ~Butterflies Are Meant To Be Free~ < !signature--> There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ I related to so much of this it was spooky....this is beyond amazing....you touched my heart. Loved it...  -SEA |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Oh my sweetest SS...you know how your words of this butterly touch my heart so deeply...my hands are shaking as I type due to the feeling that you evoke through your poetry with him...living, breathing, giving within your soul. You carry him with you while you write like this...a style and a form that is not yours...not his but together a melding of butterfly kisses and angel wing hugs...I could read this over and over again and each time find a new line to draw my heart to skip a beat... And then there were those eyes ... all knowing, piercing, jaded, emerald sparks. He could look right thru you ... or see behind your deepest, hidden layer. He was the silver, etched, moon that pulled all my tides, he was the whispered changing of my seasons. For a too few precious months ... all my orange-glow suns -- rose and set in him. He was a poet, prophet, an empyrean, he was innocence taken too soon. A scarred child, a wounded dove, he was a lesson in forgiveness. In patience, understanding, acceptance ... most of all in the trust found in unconditional love. My goodness Jan....I've never seen anything like this in my life...such beauty and love flowed through your pen in this...I feel as though I've watched your life within him upon this page...Your heart sings in this and I hear it's melody floating to the heavens tonight....simply angelic~  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet, my friend, this is beautiful beyond words...it is a piece of your heart...I can see it ...and it makes me cry with the love that it feels and the expression that is the poetry of you....amazing work!!!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"To this day I'm not sure if I found him, or he found me ... yet I know fate found us." Wonderful free verse Janet Marie! It's so great to see you trying something new, and accomplishing it so well! Keep stretching that pen ... the excerise you're giving it is having amazing results!! Really well done JM ... enjoyed this tremendously! Best wishes, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"he was the whispered changing of my seasons." wow. that just said it all for me. How do you do this? This is so in sync with my mood, Janet. And loved the free verse...love to see YOU, playing with your poetry....absolutely marvelous....now I'm going back to read. YOU. Again. and again. LOL...I tip m'beer to your mug of raspberry tea....Love you. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
yeah yeah yeah - In our male dominated world 98% of the people who worship a diety use the masculine pronoun - You know if I'd attempted this, that line at the end would have been "She is poetry" and all the other pronouns changed as well....Enough teasing-- Janet - this is beautiful - and like others above me - I share the feelings you expressed and can tell you honestly I could not have written it half so well |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My sweet friend, you have penned not only your first free verse but I would say after reading ALL of your works that this one and this one alone stands in a class of itself. The freedom you found in your words glows from your heart straight into your quill and onto the page. You my friend were born for free verse and this proves it and now it is my turn to say to you....ya better watch out or someone(mainly a cowboy) may call you a "POET". Superb line breaks, emotion, imagery, and flow. "SUPERB" in every sense of the word. CONGRATS!!!! and hugs to you my friend. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Well your talent is certainly showing in this one. And I'm a little jealous. Winkiewinkie. Sy |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, sure....first time...right! You've been writing free verse for years and hiding it to spring on us like an innocent vir....er, girl. This is TERRIFIC, Janet MArie!!!!!!!! |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"I saw him standing there at the fray, in the gray edges just outside the shadows. From the first moment I laid eyes on him ... I knew he was special ... gifted ... wounded. There was a certain frailty about him, as if someone would speak too loudly ... he would slip back into the darkness. And then there were those eyes ... all knowing, piercing, jaded, emerald sparks. He could look right thru you ... or see behind your deepest, hidden layer. You could not witness him ... and not witness his light ... his glow." --JM, this reminds me exactly of the one that I love... Your writing has such a unique grace. You are truly gifted my friend. Wondrous work. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sea-gator ... thank you very much for this reply ... and Im pleased you could relate... that something this special happended to you too. Holly.. me SS ... what can I say to such a heartfilled and touching reply ... you have always seen "him" in my writing .. and the way you celebrate him lets me know you are really a butterfly  thank you for letting me share him with you. love ya my girlie Martie ... I dont pretend for a minute that this first attempt is anywhere near where it needs to be as far as "form" ... but I thank you for letting my words touch you so and most of all for inspiring me to try new things. It felt really right.. writing this piece ... about him ... this way. Kit ... thank you my sweet cheerleader... you always encourage us all so genuinely. your love for poetry is always evident. Sweet Sen ... thank you baby...ya know.. I had to try something new.... trying to keep up with you of late...watching your poetry grow ... inspires us to reach for new things. Cheers me sweet twin me loves ya too Wil ... thank you kind poet sir ... your replies are like poetry ... thank you for such generous words.. he inspires great things in me.. I can only try to him justice with my words. Mark ... ya know cowboy ... YEAH .. YOU KNOW and thank you just dont cover it ... thank you for the help in editing and critiqueing ... and for always being there. quiet comfort ... yeah .. you know love you. Sy-guy... thank you muchly.. coming from you my gator of rhyme extraordinaire ... that is quite a compliment ... and *winkiewinkie* right back at ya Sweet Deer ... LOL ...thank you sir for the excellent.. tho I do know I have much to learn in trying this new style ... I thank you for always only seeing the potential. Krista ... TY to you sweet poet ... and your grace is something wonderous to behold as well .. I am so pleased you see some of your heart in this. thank you all for such sweet, special replies and for understanding my need to celebrate this very special man ... my butterfly.. my angel of poetry .. love ya all love poetry land me [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jan~ my what do i say to THIS? this was phenoneminal...breathtaking. beauty and love echoed in every single line. you and he are as one when you write about him janet. and even though i never met him, i feel as though i have by knowing you. your gift is amazing and as far as writing in free verse, i think you do it eloquently. the finest words in Webster couldn't do this piece justice so i will end with by simply saying, this is poetic justice at its finest! love ya, me "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jan, I am in absolute awe after reading this. DeVante brings out such passion, emotion,and fire to your words. He must have been an incredible teacher and you a very fast learner, because you are one of very few poets I know, who can express themselves like this. I do so LOVE when he comes to visit us!!! Perhaps we all owe him something. The gift he has given you, has been in return given to us. I know that I am forever grateful to him for that. I said it once and I will say it again.........Heaven is a better place because of him. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Janet I am in awe. This is by far the most eloquent and moving piece of poetry I have read in a long time. It leaves me breathless. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ 'he was a lesson in forgiveness' I don't feel the need to expound further - as this said it all for me. Lovely render from your heart, lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is beyond words, it's hard to describe such beauty, when it is clearly here for us to see, Janet this is awesome! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Janet Marie, Oh my, you have floored me with this one, this is your first attempt at free verse! Well, I'd say you are free! It's flowing, do some more, please Kathleen |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Oh Janet Marie, my dear, sweet, wonderful friend. This poem is a shear work of art. I am sitting here in awe at the beauty and wonder I feel, and I feel the love and passion and depth of your words in my soul. your first attempt at free verse sounds like you've been writing them all your life and i know why. Because your muse is your great love and he will always be your inspiration and with this you will always write extraordinary poetry. Thank you so much for letting me be a part of this, the most beautiful poem I have ever read. I love you, Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Beautiful, I just don't know what else to say, I'm lost for words. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
He is anticipation everlasting ... he is every verse to be written. The rhythm, the reason I rhyme, He is my poetic justice ... he is inspiration ... on high. He is poetry ... my reason, my purpose. WOW WOW WOW Jan as with every new poetic venture you attempt the results are stunning especially when they are inspired by your true muse Vante. Excellent and beautiful poem, soul mates will always remain with us. look forward to more free verse. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
WEll, my dear, you should write free verse more often. This is stunning!. I am so amazed at your talents, for I think free verse is much more difficult than structured, and you did it so well. Applause!!!!! Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I truly dont have words to tell you all how these replies touch me... I was so nervous trying something new.. your encouragement is so wonderful... thank you becomes too little to say after awhile ... Amy ... my goodness!!!!! ...thank you so much sweetie .. though TY seems like it wont do this beautiful reply justice .. you are sunshine my dear. Marina .. TY SO MUCH .. you humble and compliment me and touch me deeply with this reply ... and with your acceptance of him...yes I do so love when he comes to visit too...*smile* thank you so much for you high praise of my poetry my friend.. Coming from one with your talent... It means much to me. Kathy ... thank you Hon ... truly.. what a wonderful thing to say!!!! Im very complimented. Margie-girl ... thank you my all knowing poet,...yes.. he taught me so much... and that line says it all.. your right. TY Rosebud ... thank you for such a sweet and wonderful reply ... yes he was indeed "clearly beautiful" thanks again for all your replies to my work of late. Kathleen ... thank you so much sweet poet.. yes I have to admit.. It was a "free feeling" to write without "needing the rhyme" ... though that style of writing is still my first love and instinct. TY Ellie .. I hardly know what to say to this touching sweet reply ... thank you so much.. you were one of the first people to read my work so long ago back in SJ and you always celebrated and encouraged my need to write of him ... it was the only way to heal in the loss and to honor the gifts he gave me for your amazing reply and compliment of this poem ... I am at a loss for words and deeply touched thank you and bless you sweet lady ... love you too. Eagle .. what a beautiful thing to say... thank you my gentle sweet friend. Brigator ... you have always said he was my "real" muse ... thank you for your understanding and also for your encouragement for me to try new things...also for your friendship Lizzie ... thank you SO much sweet poet and friend .. I do hope to write more of this style of poetry...It felt really "right" ... I wish to learn more and grow in it ... but like you.. I do so love the rhyme and structure... its how I have always written ... thank you for the wonderful praise and encouragement. THANK YOU ALL love you much jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-14-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"To this day I'm not sure if I found him, or he found me." "No one hade ever needed me like that before, until then I never knew I needed someone to need me like that." Fantastic sharing of these needs and desires within your heart. I have felt these feelings...I am never happy unless I have someone close to me that needs me...then I feel valuable...James |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
hey sis--surprise mind if i use my old/own name (haha) i'm at a friends house and snuck in for a sec and i am still stunned and shaking from reading this latest tribute to Vante' it is quite simply amazing to me the way he influences your writing. the others here see it too. this is by far one of your best of him, for him.i saw the way he changed you, and the way he changed your poetry. and its so cool (and kinda strange) to see you writing with out the rhyme you have always written with. you make it look like you've been doing it forever. i'm printing this out now, to read over and over. i'll talk to you soon love ya seeeestur lil sis my sister is the poet I am but a shadow. by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
And I ... like they ... was drawn to the flame Just as I am drawn to your gift of descriptive writing. Very well done, jm. I thoroughly enjoyed every line, every phrase. < !signature-->...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -me, Song of Gesture [This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 10-14-2000).] |
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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
You have a lovely, sweet spirit. I see it, read it and felt it. Emily |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
WOW!!! when you come out of a slump you really do it up and put a ribbon on it. I can't find the words to describe the intensity of the passion and depth of thought here. Once again Janet you have spoken via the written word right from your heart and I am going back now to read it again. If this is your first attempt then I'll have to put on my seat belt to get ready for your second and beyond. Absoluetly wonderful Janet!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
James ....yes... EXACTLY my friend ... most times I feel more content in being needed than in being loved ... my own insecurities.. I do know ... thank you for the all knowing reply SBJ. Lil Sis ... thank you baby girl ... and Im SO pleased you got to come in and see this one ... thank you for always seeing him in me ... and I figured the free verse would be a surprise to you .. you been reading my rhymes since we were kids ... love ya..."seeestur" Chans ... thank you so much for being drawn here and for the sweet replyEmily ... thank you new, kind poet ... it is his spirit that you feel and that makes me very happy. Ethome ... HEY YOU ... OH boy have I missed you... thank you SO much my sweet friend ... you know how I treasure your words to my work...I will be in touch very soon to your note ... and please dont stay away so long we NEED your beautiful poetry.. and so do you thank you ALL again .. each of these replies are so amazing to my heart, love ya jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, this was absolutly amazing. You can do free verse girl. I'm sorry I missed this one, you know me never paying enough attention, but I'm so glad I read it now. I really can't describe my favorite parts, there is so many. Like I said before, his echo lives in you. Parker |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you P-man....so very much ... Im so glad you got to see this one thank you for seeing him and hearing his echo in my poetry. thank you again for the tribute you wrote for him. like I always say...hung the moon thank you all for these replies There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 11-09-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Janet I just had to go through this one again and enjoy the thrill of your open hearted happiness as these wonders of virtuality become visons permanently installed in connected waves....and you know....I was thrilled too just as you were being thrilled by this new creativeness, this perspective of inspiration, flowing into you, restoring you to the depth of your own talent....and it made me very happy to think that there is someone with such an all encompassing love for this undefined language of poetry, someone that really inspires me and many others...and I have to say I wish you the world at the tip of your pen again and again. Your old poet buddy...etVANhome |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
E-babes...my goodness ..you are spoiling me rotten ...thank you more than my words can say for this... me thinks ya give me way to much credit ... but me loves ya for it As do MOST All of us here in poetry land ... I do love poetry, crave it even .. and if that shines thru along with my love for him.. then I must be doing something right.... we learn as we go ...and we grow ... thank you for always seeing me in such poetic light... thank you my friend for being you. you are Van-tastic jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Janet, I saw this one in CA and you did an astounding job on it...free verse and you go very well together...and you know I liked this one, and that I could relate...wonderful work. Elizabeth |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
J.M. This is so powerful, can't tell you how much I enjoyed reading it, like a good oil painting the more you look the more you see, and you are a grand master. I am in awe of your shape and form and content. Congratulations, you must do more of this kind of work, I think you have a special gift in this genre. Regards Olias |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Janet, You have left me speechless. Simply beautiful and amazing writing. At the moment..that is all I can say.. wow. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Yowsers...with free verse this good, let's hope it's not your last attempt. Excellent write my dear friend...almost as good as oatmeal |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Elizabeth ...Im so glad you got to read this...and yes I know... ...'and I thank you very much for the compliments and the understanding.Olias....hey you ...so nice to see your name here sir...and thank you so very much for such a generous wondeful reply ...I do hope to try writing more of this style ... just as soon as me moody muse will allow ....hope your back to stay awhile. Rose P.....thank you for the wow and the sweet reply...sometimes words arent needed. Hoot-girl .....thank you my friend...very much for the encouragement .. and for the taste of oatmeal  thanks to all for the sweet reads. love to ya jm |
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