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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Deep Beyond Hurt Do you remember the night I read to you my pledge -- how my voice quivered with tears -- while your eyes welled, shedding drops of liquid love. Rain of new devotion falling like a blanket -- dying in loneliness once a thought had too often -- it washed far from my door. Bliss, yes it followed -- and our hearts prospered for a time. Thieves then came to dash your hope in me, turmoil struck hard blows against your heart. Silence tore at my cloak until I was left standing with a fragment of what once was whole. Draped only in quiet, I cried out to God for your life to return to my failing pulse. And by what miracle or intervention I'm not sure which to claim, slowly but surely you returned. I sensed your spirit circling my heart, prodding at my chains to see if any links would falter -- and when you trusted once again, you laid with me and moaned your passions to my soul in heated song. Now we travel a cautious road as stones set to test our feet are not all easily overcome. Yet, we cling to the thread...a single strand all we have, its binding hooks set deep beyond hurt to the depths of hope...our hearts resonate in single time. © Robert Joseph ~enb~ **Just a note, if I offended anyone in replying with individual ''thanks'' for each response to my first post, I apologize. It wasn't done in an attempt to ''highlight'' myself. I will be sure to respond more collectively in the future. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert Joseph--This is wonderful poetry...and says much about trust and hope and the strength of a relationship. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
This is really good. I don't know where you came from, but your one hellava good poet. Bravo....watching for more.  Parker |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Robert Joseph...you have set your feet on a dufficult but worthy path my friend...what a lovely write...and done worry abt your first poem... |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Poignant, hauntingly sad love poem - beautifully worded - and with tender hope at the end, however fragile. I love this. The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
have read your poem several times, before I post, you are a great writer and I admire your work. well done Charisma |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I agree, very well done lucky Writing isn't just something I do... it's something I am... To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my greatest delight... [Marg |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You are a fine addition to Passions Robert..and I hope you will continue to grace us with your fine poetry. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
i agree with the above, this is high quality for your first post...very nice work, very nice story...hope all is well and heres a (non)jinxed welcome |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
This is a beautifully worded poem, a very welcome addition to us here at Passions. Well done  Marsha |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Martie, Parker, Paula, Rosemary, Charisma, Lucky, Victoria, Jinxed, and Marsha... Thank you all, I'm genuinely pleased with the warm welcome, and receptiveness to my writing. I'm pleased to know each of you found something to enjoy in this piece. Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I read much passion in this, it makes me want to read more than once, and each time I do I feel more of it, it's a very well done piece. Don't worry about replying individually, someetimes we have to do that when have the chance, sometimes I forget myself and then never get around to doing it. < !signature--> Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Robert Joseph* This is spectacular, you have taken us full circle in the love hurt and catious road back to love. My heart felt hopes that this is a one way trip back to the love that sounds meant to be. As far as individual replies...don't worry about it...some people never give thanks so I'd say anyway you go about it is just right! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another very well written piece, Robert. It just flows so beautifully! Denise |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is quite beautiful Robert, and I agree don't worry if that's the way you want to do it that's your thing I certainly am not offended,and I agree your a very good writer look forward to reading more. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Kathleen, Butterflies-dc, Denise, and Rosebud... Thank you so much, I value each response. Robert Joseph |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Sometimes we have to hurt a little to remind us what we have taken for granted. I loved your poem! |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
inot2B, thanks for taking the time to respond, I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this piece. Robert Joseph |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RJ~ This is a stunning write. 'binding hooks set deep beyond hurt to the depths of hope' And where there is hope .... there is light. This one indeed whispered the blues. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good evening Robert Joseph, This is excellent and a joy to read. I'm glad that I came by your place this evening. Bill |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Marge, and Bill, I appreciate your kind responses. I'm pleased to know you found this piece to be enjoyable. Robert Joseph |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
I've been on this same timid ascent, and may I say you've captured it beautifully. From one new member to another: Welcome! Thoroughly enjoyed this... ~ Beth |
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