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Victoria
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0 posted 2000-10-11 11:34 AM


come bathe with me in hot springs of the earth
splurging sinfully as if in a bordello
amongst magnolia trees and holly
relaxing to the strings of a cello
come bath with me in our symphony
where natural minerals heal and invite
within rocky mountains majesty
and skies of lavender bright
healing in hot pools of the earth
where grazing mountain sheep roam
the wonderous feeling of rebirth
beneath darkness and heavens starry dome
rejuvenate our love in hot springs
the vitality of mind..body and spirit sings




A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2000-10-11 04:01 PM


Lovely descriptive writing...sounds like a plan...could be a rendezvous...James
Dee
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2 posted 2000-10-11 04:07 PM


Such a beautiful piece, Victoria. How could any man refuse!
Dee

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3 posted 2000-10-11 04:09 PM


mmm..very nice.   Sounds like a fun visit to me. Your descriptions make me want to sink right in.  


My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber.

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4 posted 2000-10-11 04:27 PM


Thank you James..i didnt think anyone liked this one..thanks for sending it around again..

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- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

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5 posted 2000-10-11 04:31 PM


Sounds perfect after a long day! Very enjoyable read~
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6 posted 2000-10-11 04:35 PM


Well..i wouldnt mind having an invitation myself haa...thank you Dee..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

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7 posted 2000-10-11 04:36 PM


Thank you Temptress..since i have a pinched nerve today..i could use it haa..
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8 posted 2000-10-11 04:37 PM


thank you butterflies dont cry..so glad you peeked in...

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2000-10-11 04:46 PM


Wonderful comparisons Victoria ... what better place to rejuvinate one's love than in a "rejuvinating spa" ... very creative!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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10 posted 2000-10-11 04:50 PM


thank you kit..so glad you enjoyed..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Robert Joseph
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11 posted 2000-10-12 07:56 AM


splurging sinfully as if in a bordello
amongst magnolia trees and holly

Victoria, There is a soulful, earthy energy to the passions in this piece, I enjoyed greatly. The above mentioned lines stood out in my mind, as both magnolia and holly weave a bit of magic for me.

Robert Joseph


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12 posted 2000-10-12 09:43 AM


Thank you Robert..your comments inspire me to keep writing..looking forward to reading more of your poetry..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Mark Bohannan
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13 posted 2000-10-12 09:52 AM


Very lovely and I love the mention of Magnolia trees.  My favorite tree for sure.  I loved this from beginning to end.  
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14 posted 2000-10-12 10:01 AM


How enchanting...such a picture you paint
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15 posted 2000-10-12 10:14 AM


Thank you Mark..i wrote another about making love under a magnolia tree..i was in Vegas and a pic of a magnolia tree was on the wall and it inspired me to write a poem after i lost all my money haa..nothing else to do in vegas when you are broke haa..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

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16 posted 2000-10-12 10:16 AM


Thank you Paula..im going have to set out and look for a hot springs now..im sure theres one around here somewhere haa..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

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17 posted 2004-09-15 07:31 PM


May all your hot spring adventures be fulfilling...James
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