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Creature of the Night |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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*This piece began as a Halloween poem, but grew into ... well ... "this". I hope it goes without saying, that this is not based on personal experience, it just took it's own path based on the comparisons I seemed to be drawing. . Creature of the Night Above the slight October breeze, a voice rose through the night, She heard it calling out her name, it filled her soul with fright; With drunken eyes, she woke from sleep, disoriented there, And struggled to awake her mind ... in to the dark she stared. Another noise, a whispered voice, she turned her head to strain, Intently listening for the sounds, repeated once again; With grated resonance it hummed, a mantra to her soul, A force there in totality, that beckoned her to go. Without a will, she rose to elbow, from the sheets, slid she, While placing feet upon the ground, propelled unwittingly; She reached toward the nightstand, for the comfort that she knew, And grasped the bottle, gave a pull, as further, she withdrew. Delusions rose from liquid, as she drank her fill that night, Her tortured soul, was fed by this ... her creature of the night; Her mind was fogged, and screaming now, it begged her try to cease, But hypnotized, she carried on, her pace seemed to increase. She stumbled to the window, grasped the edge, and opened wide, The bottle fell from trembling hands, she could not quell the tide; With frightened eyes she peered into the blackness of the night, And tried to focus on the voice that filled her soul with fright. Unnerved and trembling, there she stood, as shapes began to form, Beyond confines of sanity, her terror now reborn; With knuckles white and tightened grip, she leaned a little more, Into the blackness of the night, still terrified ... unsure. She heard a gentle fluttering, and gave a nervous sigh, Illusions sharply teased her through intoxicated eyes; But suddenly ... out from the depths, below her window sill, A darkened vision there arose ... her taker of freewill. She watched as if a movie played in front of this, her eyes, As slowly there, it levitated, heedless of her cries; It's eyes were darkened pools of crimson, peering through her soul, It's skin, like glowing embers as the whitest hot of coal. The stench of breath upon her skin, not five inches away, Left wanting to recoil in protest, yet she could not stray; Her gaze held sickly mesmerized, it whispered out her name, As there it hovered, flowing cape, in legendary fame. With liquid motion, in a flash, it slipped into her room, And guided her to ease her back, to meet her pending doom; She struggled then, beneath caress, as hands brushed lightly there, Her neck exposed the jugular, as claws stroked back her hair. In weak attempt, she gave a cry, as sharply there she felt, The break of skin, the tear of flesh, in protest there, she knelt; Her struggles ceased, she settled limp, no longer would she flee, What once was agony and terror, turned to ecstasy. She sank into a darkened place, reality no more, In witness of her old companion, swallowing her whole; It drained her of her essence, as it drank to it's delight, It turned the tables, all consuming, creature of the night. In days that passed, she withered slowly, shrank from dawning sun, Grew weaker with the passing hours ... a hunger had begun; It started as a gnawing ache, deep in the pit of her, And grew into a thirst she could not fathom, nor endure. Her skin a ghostly white, and eyes that rimmed with crimson red, She hovered 'neath her mind in torture for this life of dread; A shell of what she used to be, she cowered and she cried, Amongst the shadows, now her only refuge there to hide. Addiction wrought, with trembling hands, she cursed this hellish plight, As there she drank, in tandem with her creature of the night. /Kit McCallum . [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-11-2000).] |
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Ohhhhhhh Kit - This is simply incredible!!! Pulled me in and held me from start to finish. Great story, terrific writing.... I love it! Bonnie |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thank you Bonnie!!! I was nervous about posting this one, as it's pretty far off my beaten path, I'm so glad you commented (and so quickly) Phew! Now I can go to work, LOL ... thank you!!!  Much appreciation, /Kit |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kit~ WOW!!  This is definately one of your best! This held me and wouldn't let go.Fantastic!!  -SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WHOA!!!! WHEW!!!! WOWSERS!!!!! WHAT A WEAVE!!!!! KIT THIS IS AWESOME!!!!!! REALLY!! Have you been hanging out with Marina and her vampy friends???   LOLthis is so powerful..just pulls the reader in as you build up the pace and the drama... very COOL..very ... take a bow ... later-bite-me-gator (hehe)jm |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow...Kit..color me fearful..you have written this so well!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~SEA: Wow! Thanks for the fantastic SEA, I really appreciate it!!! ~Janet Marie: Oh girl ... sometimes I wonder what I'd do without you!!! Bite-me-gator? ROFL!!! Love ya JM, and thanks! ~Martie: Thank you so much Martie ... colour me very grateful for these wonderful words! Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Kit, I love this one!!! You have done a great job with this "creature of the night"! ROFL at JM!! Girl, that is the last time I set YOU up on a date with one of my friends!!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Okay... *G* Now I know not to read one of your poems when I sneak a peek at work. LOL. For once I started reading, woe be to the unwitting boss who might have interrupted me with minor details like "work"... I was BUSY and couldn't stop till I finished! *G* Great read! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Marina: Thanks so much Marina ... and no more dates like this for JM! ~Suthern: I'm glad you got wrapped up in this one Suthern ... keep an eye out for that boss now! LOL With Much appreciation, /Kit |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Fantastic Kit!!! WOW...I loved it!!! Hmmm your first time like this?? What a natural!! Great writing~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
My dear Kit What a tremendous tale!! I was totally captivated from the first word to the last. An incredible piece of poetry, my dear. Your talents are overwhelming!! This is one of your best, for sure, but they are mounting up. You have written so many exquisite poems Liz |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantastic writing, Kit! Perfect rhythm. Flows flawlessly! You are indeed talented! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Bumping this one back to the top. More should have a chance to read this wonderful writing Liz |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
First Liz-thank you for bumping as I had missed this due to my shortened time available here. Kit, I have always enjoyed your writing and well what can I say about this other than "I BOW TO YOU IN HUMBLENESS". This piece is so awesome and so unlike you in so many ways but then it "IS" like you in the fact that you have stretched the boundaries of growth and that is SOOOOOOOO you. Excellent piece and in my library it will go. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I keep tellin myself..(little box, little box..little box.)you would think I would remember to check the darn thing LOL |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Butterflies: Thanks so much for the wonderful response Butterflies! I guess I've been a little dark a few times, but this one was a little odd nonetheless, glad you enjoyed! ~Liz: You are so kind Liz ... thank you soooo much for all these lovely words, they mean a great deal to me, thank you! ~Denise: Aahhhh, the flow, the flow, thanks Denise!!! I just love it when the rhythm works, but it's funny because I could read it one way, and someone else another, so sometimes it's hard to tell if it's working. Thanks so much! ~Liz: ~Mark: No humbling allowed Mark, LOL ... with all the wonderful writers around here, including yourself, it is "I" who am humbled, and so grateful to be in everyone's company. I love this place! ~Mark: LOL!Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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