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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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It’s been a month of Sundays since I have seen your face You let me down completely, long gone without a trace What did I do or not do to make you go away? I thought I’d have you always until my dying day. Now nights play long and lonely without you by my side Despair and heartache gather, I have nowhere to hide Unanswered questions haunt me, no reason can I find We had it all, I thought so, or was I merely blind? Did spoken vows mean nothing, just words of emptiness What happened to the promise of wedded blissfulness Did I have expectations beyond reality Did you have needs, desires, that I just couldn’t see? Could it have been the struggle to make it to the top That never ending battle, demands that would not stop The mounting bills, receding security of youth? Well, since you never told me, I’ll never know the truth. Denise (just fiction!) [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 10-10-2000).] |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Denise~ I was so worried till I got to the part of the fiction.WHEW!  Excellent tell. -SEA |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Great writing. I have been through what you told about and it is no picnic. I enjoyed the read. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've captured many of the questions and heartache in this so well Denise, and I enjoyed the tempo ... well done! (and Phew! Glad it is fiction for you my friend). Best wishes, /Kit |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Wow Denise, You have sure captured the essence of a wounded heart in this wonderful poem. Bonnie |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Denise, this could be the life story of thousands. Very Good!! Robert Joseph |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Denise, glad it is just fiction..but im sure so many relate to the midlife crisis stage of life..enjoyed.. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you, SEA, Alan, Kit Bonnie, Robert and Victoria for reading and commenting. I'm glad you all enjoyed it! Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem! It flows well, beginning to end. (Too bad life doesn't! *G*) |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I could name lots and lots and lots of people who could fill these shoes... You speak wise words, my friend..  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise~ It is always a pleasure to read one from you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Your talent shows in this...especially seeing that it was fiction brought to life under your pen. Excellent work~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Denise what talent, it was so real, so emotional to read. Kathleen |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
great writing, and so true. many people can find theirself in it. well done. Charisma |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ahhh it's so nice to read you again Denise You had me going there, So glad it's fiction Wonderfully written!Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Glad you put that disclaimer on this! I was worried! This is wonderfully sad...I like it.  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Phew! You had my eyes popping there momentarily too Denise! You've written an EXCELLENT piece, considering it's fiction. Strong emotion and something many can relate to. Though I've not been through it all, but I can relate to this, and it's questions. It came close a few times....but we're stuck like glue. Again Denise, this is EXCELLENT!! ~Hugs~ <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great piece Denise, considering the fact that it's fiction......well that makes you a great fiction writer, as well as a non-fiction one. Thanks for sharing! Nathan |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I too was glad to find that it was just fiction and went back to read a second time with much relief. Loved it much and you sure know how to dwell up those emotions don't you? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Denise, I know what you write about here, first hand. It's a heart-breaking time of life to go through. You've related well, almost as though you have been there. I let my imagination go now and then, but most of my poems are from experience. It is a fine writer who can go off and create something like you have here. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Denise--You write the heart break of so many...and you make it so real...glad that it is not. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
HAS to be fiction, Denise. This couldn't happen to you. I mean, men can be dumb but.....  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Suthern - life sure can have its tempo disruptions, can't it? Thanks for reading and replying! Nan - Yes, me too. There is way too much heartbreak, for sure. Thanks for reading and replying! Marge - likewise! Check your email!Butterflies - Thanks! I'd thought I'd try something I don't normally do. I usually write from personal experience. Kathleen - Thanks for your lovely reply! Charisma - Thanks so much for your lovely reply! Maree - So nice to read you when I get the opportunity too! Thanks! Sharon - hehehe...thanks! I thought it best to put in the disclaimer so as not to cause you all to worry! Rebecca - Sorry.....hehehe....maybe I should have put the disclaimer at the top! ~hugs~ Nate - Thank you and you are quite welcome! Mark - Thanks! I'm glad you were relieved! Dixie - I'm sorry that you had to experience such pain. Thanks for reading and replying. Martie - Thanks so much! Balladeer - Thanks! What a sweet thing to say! Thanks again, everybody, for reading and taking the time to reply. It is always appreciated. Especially after a bad day at work. Denise |
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