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BloomingRose
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0 posted 2000-10-10 02:48 PM


Wall Of Ice

How does one tear down a wall of ice
get past ghost from the past
things that tear at one's soul

How can ice melt from years of fears
a long worn refuge
warmth from lovers night gives no relief

A slow candle burns

BloomingRose


© Copyright 2000 DebraS. - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-10-10 03:16 PM


Slowly the candle of trust burns
With each moment that one earns
Care and respect in what one believes
Taking time to see what the other sees

Slowly the ice will melt in chance
With the visions of heaven's dance
Held in the light of friendships eye
Golden sparkles in midnights cry



Dee
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since 2000-08-19
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2 posted 2000-10-10 05:24 PM


BR, romantic candles can melt a wall of ice! Lovely work.
Dee

Marsha
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3 posted 2000-10-10 05:45 PM


BR ice melts, eventually. I really think this is great.
Take care
                  Marsha
keep a light burning and soon the light ousts the cold ice.

BloomingRose
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4 posted 2000-10-10 08:17 PM


Mark~ Your words ring true...thank you.

Dee~ Thanks, you put a nice touch to what I wrote.


Marsha~ I think you are right. In time the ice has to melt, especially with a candle steady burning. Thank you for words of wisdom.  


Lone Wolf
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5 posted 2000-10-10 08:22 PM


The ice comes down bit and bit and piece by piece . . . the same way it was constructed my friend.  Interesting thoughts.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Robert Joseph
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6 posted 2000-10-11 12:19 PM



Blooming Rose, The entire piece is compelling, but I especially enjoyed the way you chose to end it...A slow candle burns...a flicker of hope inside the walls of ice.

Robert Joseph

Irish Rose
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7 posted 2000-10-11 04:03 PM


Robert is right, it is compelling.  Candles are here to stay aren't they?  This is lovely.
Sven
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8 posted 2000-10-11 05:46 PM


The flame has to burn for a long time. . .

Wonderful. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Butterflies_dont_cry
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9 posted 2000-10-11 06:54 PM


Tender writing Deb, this was beautiful in a very soft and sad sort of way...not sure that description fits quite right but I did enjoy it very much~
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