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Lost in the fog |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho 
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Lost in the fog lucky Senior Member since 01-17-2000 Posts 693 -------------------------------------- A flock of Canadian geese crossed a jagged sky on a recent night most likely their first flight of the season back they blasted the quiet dale with their explicit song ever calling sounding kindred as to a faraway ship lost in a fog by the time the dark nights nomadics were out of ears accosting range my decision had been made I was moving back to where I came back to the place a long time gone the home in which and where I belong. It was late autumn & a blanket of hoar frosted everything I looked for signs of life in the early morning shadows as I reached to scoop a fist-full of freshly turned freedom remembering the farm and where I was raised one needs to return upon occasion you know the quietness and smells of the land blending with ‘ol memories to open up one’s whole being but is that really so unusual bubbling o’er again with wonder and fresh questions come on over sit I’ll tell you the story how on curious harsh coast the rhythmic lines roar of the sea is pierced by coupling sounds where the sea meets her lover ground normally the long daz are ample for the timely dramas of life to be played before the longing to abandon such phases but one year the great windy air-streams controling the weather changed their courses here storms pelted the coast in a blanket of crystalline despite the unexpected harsh I knew well it was right to go winter’s freeze had already begun I could see it all along the laboring coast with the combing and winter and your reminisce meandering through the old homes missing we’re no longer grounded for life as thought somewhere far into its night a distant honk of a single goose pierces the darkness and strangely enough another answers honking from a distance with exciting augur his very own miles close in minutes as they embrace to love again within it. If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) IP: Logged © Copyright 2000 lucky - All Rights Reserved Marge Tindal Member Emeritus since 11-06-1999 Posts 10669 ---------------------------------------- Lucky ME ! Finding this little gem tucked down here in prose ! Your talent is too good ... it sends out signals that beckon me ! As poignantly lovely as ever ! I really like it ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com Martie Member Emeritus since 09-21-1999 Posts 4809 ------------------------------------------- Lucky-could I paint a picture of my life like you do... always touching me so deep that I want to cry... and not sure why...this is beautiful!! [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 10-10-2000).] |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
I love this so much! Such a beautiful vision - oh, I love your writing! The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I have to tell Ron that I doubled up on this one in the Prose Forum. My apology Ron. Friends..? Dale |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
excellant writing and great format too,take care |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Jackal' Thanks a lot my friend I'm going to have to check out a few of your entries. Thanks again, Dale |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Absolutely excellent, Dale! I see that it got here ok before I could help and I'm glad it did. I know the double post was an honest mistake but the darned thing is so well done I think it should stay in both! Nice work, sir. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I was in the hospital all day waiting for Rosemary to get out of surgery... So after I had gotten tired of pacing I sat down I wrote the notes for this. As the story should go... It's about a Gander who had gotten shot and some kid mended it's wing but it would never fly again but every year the goose would return to her mate. She then would bear her young teach the young to fly and honk while dad would honk from the ground. She then would fly them south and return to spend the cold winter with her husband. Rosemary thought the idea was brilliant. Marge, Thank you so much for your love and I'm glad you took a gander. Martie, Seems I can always touch you. That's nice. And thank you for the e-mail. RJ says she will write you with the gruesomes in another e. Love ya Balladeer, Now coming from the true story teller... This is a real compliment and to have it in both forums is a double compliment. It is I who thank you sir. Christopher, thank you for your understanding and time. Hats off to the passions team. [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 10-10-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
love the image you created..thank you..  |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Victoria, I love the images you make too... thank you... Dale |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I really shouldn't bump myself like this, but I wondered if Bill had seen this yet. He's supposed to be keeping his eye on me. [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 10-12-2000).] |
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winterinblue Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 32 |
How interesting, that one of the best love poems I have ever read, has to do with geese who mate for life. People should take lessons. I enjoyed this very much. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sweet, sweet poet~ This is just as lovely as it was down in that other forum .... Fits perfectly as a poetic form and a prose form and visually as a work of art. Let's take her for another ride ... ^ ^ ^ ^ Loving your work as always. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Marge, This is a real honor, thank you so much... love ya, dale |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
ENJOY THE READ!!!!!!!!!! |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Hope it's okay if I bump this one again. It's just so special. Imagine being given such a poem, in the waiting room of a hospital, waiting for me! (Wasn't it wonderful that we found out it was NOT cancer!!!!) And you got something beautiful out of the experience! I'm still hoping Wilfred Yeats will see it. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Darling your a doll... Ducky I love you Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am. To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight. -Marge Tindal |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Compliments to you Lucky, great poem. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Lucky, I haven't enough flattery to give you. This is a beautiful, beautiful piece of work. I'm so glad so many people have 'bumped' it back up for the rest of us to read. Thank you so much for sharing this incredible verse. ~ Beth |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Dale - I wouldn't have missed this for the world - It is 11:17 AM Sat and i haven't replied to my own posts yet - (probably tonight) This one for sure shoyld be published in hard cover somewhere - - do it for me - Please |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Daniel, Thank you so much. Elizabeth, Thanks for the gracious words. Mr. Yeats, hardbound huh... Well it's at least on CD Rom but you have a good idea and I sure like to... nice compliment on the piece. thank you all, dale Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am. To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight. -Marge Tindal |
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