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The Essence of a Rose

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 10-09-2000 03:18 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Rewrite, repost.

The Essence of a Rose

She glories on a tender stem
This rose that I review
Surrounding thorns as diadem
A majesty of blue.

Her osculate is not a whim
Nor I a foolish foil
She's knighted me the sweet of them
That brought my blood to boil.

I cannot hide this heart of care
These minions of reveal
I melt within this love I bare
Nor can I bare conceal.

Somehow I can not prune this rose
Her majesty extreme
I fear that she might decompose
And turn into a dream.

The mull, to pluck, to prune, to pluck
Or should I just stay, thunderstruck.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 10-09-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

The essence of a rose is a rose is a rose.... *Sy*.. 'Tis sweet indeed..
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2 posted 10-09-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Ah yes Sy, the temperate musings of fall...and if you should pluck, I shall gather the vase...
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 10-09-2000 05:25 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Nan,
So true, so true, so true. *L* Sy

Sunshine,
The vase, with water or with out water? *L*
Janet Marie
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4 posted 10-09-2000 06:19 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Does not a rare red rose when picked ... still smell as sweet
and if she's not spared ... will not winters cold deplete
passage of time alone ... will cause her to wither on thy vine
her fragility ....her lure ... her  essence so divine

her gifts momentary ... your heart she needs to capture
for she will live on in your memory  ... her grace of sweet enrapture
as time steals her away ... give her one last long parting look
then preserve her in your soul ... as you press her in the pages of a poetry book

******
*winkiewinkie*
I can think of worse ways to end up...
when I go...
I wanna be pressed in the pages
of a Shakes sonnet...
how about you?  

Your rose garden is lovely Sy-gator
jm

Seymour Tabin
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JM,
The poem is beautiful, is it yours? Thank you sweet for the beautiful comment. *L* Sy
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Well now Sy, that will depend...do we want to dry the rose, or breath one last fragrant waft of scent...that will determine with or without water...

and it's still a most lovely poem...
Janet Marie
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well my sweet Sy...actually i guess you could say its yours now....as I wrote it for you as a poetic reply to your way cool poem...
and i forgot to mention in my above reply..
your vocabulary choices in this just blow me away...
later-poetic-rose-with-no-thorn-gator  
jm
Kit McCallum
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A wonderful command of language in this Seymour ... and such a perfect cadence, a pleasure to read aloud. Very well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 10-10-2000 06:49 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy, I am thunderstuck by the beauty of this poem, and Janet Marie, with your superb response. I sit in awe of both of you
Liz
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10 posted 10-10-2000 07:39 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour~
Beauty of the rose comes to rest upon
the pages of your poetry.

Simply said -
it blooms !

JanetMarie, a perfect poetic response.
~*Marge*~


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Seymour Tabin
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Sunshine,
I think dry with a breath of fragrance. *L*

JM,
I can't tell you how impressed I was with your poem. Excellent. *L* Sy

Kit,
And yours a wonderful comment.

Elizabeth,
To awe your poetic prowess is something. Love Sy

Marge,
And you are no slouch, "Simply said it blooms." *L* Sy

brian madden
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Somehow I can not prune this rose
Her majesty extreme
I fear that she might decompose
And turn into a dream.

wow execllent piece, wonderfully written. A rose is a rose is a rose.  

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith
Mark Bohannan
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13 posted 10-14-2000 01:14 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

My applause to you and JM both for exquisite verses beyond compare.  The language, the cadence, the content, and the flow are all amazingly beautiful.  I am now bowing to you both.  A duet might be in season as a treat to us all as I believe the two of you would re-define the term of modern day poetry.
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these remnants of a voice and smile,
landscapes cloaked in forest green ...
like your life unfolding mile by mile.

V.Teng

 
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