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2dalimit
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0 posted 2000-10-08 11:35 AM



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I met a pretty girl,
she said she loved me.
So we married, and ever since
she tried to change me.
The first thing she did was
to stop my smoking.
That wasn’t too bad, but then
she stopped my drinking.
She taught me how to dress very well
and to enjoy the Finer Arts.
She taught me gourmet cooking and
how to invest in the Stock Market.
After all these years, I’m not bitter,
I hope that you can see.
Now that I’m so improved,
She isn’t good enough for me.

© Copyright 2000 Melton Culberth - All Rights Reserved
Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
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1 posted 2000-10-08 12:21 PM


This is sad but rewarding, because nothing takes the pain away like a good dividend.  

Kathleen


Sven
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2 posted 2000-10-08 01:41 PM


Changing, yet not too much. . .

Excellent my friend. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17
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3 posted 2000-10-09 01:40 AM


Melton
  I liked this one.  It seemed to tell the simple truth about love, marriage, and divorce in this day and age.
Excellently penned my friend.

Garfield

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 2000-10-09 06:05 AM


Melton - this is great!

I like the tone, and the style...

this is my kind of freeverse - almost hear a beat to it.

Well done...

K



"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs


tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
5 posted 2000-10-09 06:20 AM


Melton~
Great writings, I really enjoyed this....thanks
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



2dalimit
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Mississippi coast
6 posted 2000-10-09 06:58 AM


Irish Rose
Seven
ggrn3
Severn
Tracie66

Thanks to all. This was only in jest. I welcomed any change because my wife and I changed together.
Melton

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
7 posted 2000-10-09 02:52 PM


Mel~
really liked the flow of this. and i also liked the joking nature of it. im glad you met someone who changed you for the better and vice versa. in a ever changing world its so nice to know that even if we change there are people who will still always love us for US.
take care.
amy  

"The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences"


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