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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-10-08 10:01 AM


                          9:00 P.M.

                          still and even,
                          with only half
                          of Luna's emergence,
                          nightshadows
                          are with me

                          gravel crunches underfoot
                          and the night is inert

                          the countryside is still

                          no disquiet, no wind
                          for it has died down

                          and glacial air nips my nose

                          sudden sough of
                          soft feathers and
                          heavy weighted push
                          off of cottonwood limb

                          betrays owl, as he seeks
                          flight, and in ascent
                          unites in quiet
                          greeting the souls that gather
                          'round

                          those souls that
                          silently watch
                          and partake of
                          the
                          nightshadow under
                          Luna's biased
                          illumination

                          I would hear their whispers
                          in the owl's translation,
                          and in his nightshadow,
                          take wing….

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Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ




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Marsha
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1 posted 2000-10-08 10:32 AM


Karilea, this is really lovely, a beautiful image painted here. You are such a great writer, I really love this one.
Take care
                      Marsha
                    

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2 posted 2000-10-08 10:45 AM


Beautiful imagery...I actually felt like I was there with you!  
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3 posted 2000-10-08 11:11 AM


Sounds like my kind of night.  Mind if I tuck this one in my pocket so it is close to my heart??
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4 posted 2000-10-08 11:22 AM


"I would hear their whispers
in the owl's translation,
and in his nightshadow,
take wing…."

Even if the other words were lacking
even if they weren't poetic
these 4 lines would stick with me and remind me I'm in the presense of a great poet.


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5 posted 2000-10-08 11:32 AM


Karilea~
Such serenity in your thoughts.

'I would hear their whispers
in the owl's translation'


Lovely, lovely, lovely !
~*Marge*~



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6 posted 2000-10-08 12:34 PM


truly inspiring work. excellent rhythm and format. also beautiful expression of your words.
take care.
amy  

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7 posted 2000-10-08 01:32 PM


In the song of nature, one hears many things. . . this is one of them. . .

Beautiful my friend. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Sunshine
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8 posted 2000-10-09 10:11 AM


thank you all for your lovely comments...
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9 posted 2000-10-09 11:18 AM


a very unique piece, Sunshine ... an inviting style ... thanks.
Sunshine
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10 posted 2000-10-31 08:37 AM


Thank you MA...this one likes me, too!

Karilea
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11 posted 2000-10-31 09:15 AM


Ahhhhhhh what beautiful images you have penned with this little gem Karilea, "nightshadows"....Love it!!!  Bonnie
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12 posted 2000-11-05 02:03 PM


Bonnie, poetic license being what it is, isn't it wonderful to make up words? So glad you liked, thank you!...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



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