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Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho

0 posted 2000-10-07 03:26 PM






Alodia sings a sadder song
these days than the purest liquid tones

which poured from her firm rosy upturned mouth in years
long past; she has known honeyed passions, her mammilla
rejoicing against his chest in sweet caresses, nestled
alongside his tongue, brushing gently across
his inner thigh. She has fed her
babies in peace

and gentleness, O gentleness

the snuggling them cozy and warm in the rocking
chair; in their bed secure. She yet can feel the magnetic era
when young men fastened their eyes on her and couldn’t pull
away. Alodia still remembers her earliest days of level plains;
of seeds and hopes; swelling seasons of growing. She has
spent decades raised proud and honored against life’s
gravity, but finds herself now drooping
a bit with age.

Bitter
harvest
time is nigh.

Suddenly cold winds

have turned savagely upon her
howling their solitary threats of a
violent winter she sings a sadder
song these days against a
darkened

sky.

Lydia, her

twin sits quietly beside
her in such solemn empathy.
A friend for life, she has no
song tonight.  No sweet
milked tears fall any
more, and her
head hangs
in the
sorrow
dark and deep

within her eye. Lydia sighs
for her and they share the same
porch swing silently, resting on a
soft cushion; two aging sisters,
as the cool mist creeps
over the

meadow.

Into an
autumn chill,

Alodia quietly sings
a slow and hollow

mournful
song.






[This message has been edited by Rosemary J. Gwaltney (edited 10-07-2000).]

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Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

1 posted 2000-10-07 03:28 PM


Your imagery is stunning and the format
very, very nice!


Kathleen


Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
2 posted 2000-10-07 03:32 PM


"proud and honored against life's gravity"
So many wonderful phrases in this piece and the gravity of your writing pulls us in to be a part of the lives of two sisters on a porch swing
Well done, Roemary
Liz

lucky
Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
3 posted 2000-10-07 04:01 PM


Rosemary,

This is truely a masterpiece... You've outdone yourself on this one... I see people talking about your imagery... I wonder if any men will respond. I wonder who knows what your talking about... Your a genius and I never could have written such.

All my love and caring, Baby_bubba



[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 10-07-2000).]

Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2000-10-07 05:13 PM


I can hear the song, Rosemary, and it's keening, although faint, immerses itself yet again in life's blood, to live one more day...

breathtaking...

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware
5 posted 2000-10-07 05:40 PM


(side note to Dale) here's one man  

Rosemary- - life's gravity pulls us all - in ways subtle and not so - and at some point we return to dust - but while my spirit lives - I won't spend too much time on the porch - yet I loved this ~S~

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