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Midnight Dance |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Singing my song, I tread the night, Like a traveling whisper, On the wind. Floating in treetops, Peeking from behind Autumn leaves. Alighting upon ears softly, Like a lover's nibble. Feel the hush of breath, In momentary solitude, Suspended in the ecstacy of thought. Then.. Retracing steps, Back to the origin of the whisper. Looking for a new path, And instructions for the next journey. My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Wonderful illustration! Loved it! sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
the whole time i was reading this i thought of Puck in "a midsummer night's dream". i like the imagery in here, especially this part: "I tread the night, Like a traveling whisper" well penned. I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Like a lover's nibble. Feel the hush of breath, In momentary solitude, Suspended in the ecstacy of thought. ================== oooohhh i like that thought... very cool words... very cool poem like a secret whispered in echos... great writing and imagery take care jm |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Snowpants: Thank you very much. I'm glad to see you're reading my work. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Ethan: I take that as a compliment for sure! Wow! Thanks. I'm glad you liked it, and appreciative of what it made you think of. Janet Marie: Thank you. That is one of my favorite parts also, and I enjoy writing this way. My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*blaming it on AOL* Double posting...ARGHHH!!  [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 10-07-2000).] |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
No problem! I really like your writing style and use of metaphors! I have to say, my favorite one is the one about driving to work at 3:45am.  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Like a traveling whisper, my favorite line!!!!!! Love it!!!!!!!!!! Kathleen |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Whispers winging waywardly within winds whistling wisdom wonderously finding fondness from feathered friends feeling flirtatious fondles from furthest familiar forwardings Exquisite writing from you in this one and so inspiring in it's beauty and sincerity. Loved it much truely....Could you tell?? |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
good one....and I enjoyed reading it.. Charisma |
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