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Fred Hobbs
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0 posted 2000-10-06 09:25 PM


Far above the rundown graveyard ‘neath the shiny old church spire
As rising moon turns ancient brass to eerie orange fire
A stealthy figure waits alone, his victim to receive
T’would be the first of many such on this All Hallows Eve

The moonlight made his hunger grow, his boldness grew as well
With evil eyes he scanned below and near as he could tell
A man he spied asleep down there against an old tree trunk
He had no way of knowin’ then, t’was Mike the village drunk

With sprouted wings the creature pounced and landed silently
Beside the old inebriate asleep against the tree
With fangs of yellow, eyes of black and breath of ancient dank
The creature found the old man’s throat, bit him and then drank

The drunk was down a pint or so before the vampire knew
This wasn’t just A-positive, this was a stronger brew
He rocked back on his haunches, his head began to spin
His bloody lips curled back to form an evil vampire grin

“Wake up” he shook the village drunk, “Wake up and tell me how
You happen to have blood like this, you have to tell me now”
Old Mike smiled up through sleepy eyes and gave the beast a wink
“I’ll tell you what you want to know but first buy me a drink”

“A drink is what I had in mind when I first saw you there
A drink it is and then perhaps your secret you will share
What is it that you crave good sir, some water from the pail?”
“No water please,” Old Mike shot back, I’d rather have some ale”

In the pub they call McGinty’s Place they sauntered to the bar
The drunkard with his smilin’ face, the stranger so bizarre
“A tankard of your finest ale,” Mike told the barman Tim
“And when it’s time for payin’ up just give the bill to him”

“One ale it is,” and then Tim turned, “And good sir what for you?”
“A bloody Mary will do fine” Real blood?  Could be, who knew?
“And so,” the vampire started, “This ale you drink a lot?”
Old Mike lied “Hardly ever!  My secret this is not”

Mike held a silver flask up high and took a long hard pull
“Tis this that you have tasted sir, of this my blood is full
The vampire grabbed the silver flask and drank the contents down
He shuddered and began to laugh but then began to frown


He rattled and he shook a bit, he hollered and he squirmed
He scrambled round in circles like a puppy bein’ wormed
He grabbed his throat in terror, his skin began to burn
“What poison have you brought me in this lovely silver urn?”

“Why tis only holy water Father Michael gave to me
T’was bringin’ it to widow Rourke, she’s crippled don’t you see
She uses it to pray at home but I can get some more”
By then the dreaded vampire though lay dead upon the floor

The town turned out to celebrate the village vampire’s death
But if you’ve a word of sympathy,  you’d best just save your breath
For now at old McGinty’s Place they serve a strange nightcap
And a keg of Father Michael’s brew they always keep on tap



© Copyright 2000 Fred Hobbs - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2000-10-06 09:35 PM


Could I have a Mike on Tap, please???...
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2 posted 2000-10-06 09:53 PM


Ah, Mr. Fred...I admire your writing so much for the way you can weave a tale and the flavor you can inject into every line. This is classic Fred Hobbs...and it gets no better than that.  
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2000-10-06 10:42 PM


Fred,
Just wonderful, I second Balladeer this is pure Fred Hobbs.

Fred Hobbs
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4 posted 2000-10-07 08:35 PM


Nan:  Would that be a Mike Regular or a Mike Light?  Thanks for reading.

Balladeer:  For every one I write well, you write ten that are better.  But thanks for the encouragement.

Sy:   Same as above.  I appreciate your encouraging response.

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-10-07 10:04 PM


FredHobbs~
This was just refreshingly wonderful.
~*Marge*~



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Denise
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6 posted 2000-10-07 10:43 PM


This is delightful, Fred! Always nice to see you post!!

Denise

Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2000-10-07 11:30 PM


Applause!!! Clapping, smiling ... excellent Fred! Wow, I so enjoyed this wonderful tale. Perfect flow ... what a splendid read! Gee, can you tell I liked this???  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Poet deVine
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8 posted 2000-10-07 11:34 PM


I began to read this poem. Then read it softly, slowly...could hear the howl of the wind in the background...a dog barked..and something creaked...

Your poem has such an AIR about it...the words and images you created also created an atmosphere here in my room...

This is not just good, it's magnificent!!!!!!!!!!!!

WhtDove
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9 posted 2000-10-08 12:46 PM


This was excellent! Had me 'sucked' in it did.  And then right in the middle aol booted me. LOL, but I came right back to finish it.

Excellent story!

Fred Hobbs
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10 posted 2000-10-08 08:04 PM


Marge: Thanks for the kind words.

Denise:  Thanks,  You always take the time to make me feel welcome.

Kit: I'm thrilled that you liked it. It's great to get good reviews.

Sharon: I appreciate the kind words but it's so easy to write for someone with an imagination like your's.

White Dove: Glad you came back for a second shot!  Thanks. . .

fh

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11 posted 2000-10-08 08:46 PM


~Totally enjoyed this Fred Hobbs. Very cool writing. Had me the whole time. Thanks. Take care now. *Peace.
Nan
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12 posted 2000-10-09 01:35 PM


...Just had to read this again..
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