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0 posted 2000-10-06 08:04 PM



In the shimmer of a candlelight

Close your eyes and release your mind,
leave your pain and sorrow behind,
let me lead you through the night,
in the shimmer of a candlelight.

Close your eyes and relax my dear,
while my love is coming near,
temptation is growning and tense abound,
let me discover this place beyond.

Sweet promises whispered by my sweet lips,
The light softly touch from my fingertips,
When they slide lightly all over your skin,
Feeling the vibration that comes from within.

My fingertips that caress you softly and sweet,
Searching their way goin slowly beneath,
Sweet sensual smooches so softly and fine,
My tongue that meet yours passionately entwine.

Trembeling lightly while that we explore,
Satisfy the desire longing for more,
with every touch we feel the temptation,
losing control so tense in anticipation.

Oh your sweet love is really so intense,
I Drown in your love and loss all of my sence,
Involved through our passions, so wild and so sweet,
Feel how our souls confluence, each time that we meet.

Close your eyes while I'm holding you tight,
together we had explore the cherish height,
soft whispering words are coming through,
whispering softly "I love you".

Charisma

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1 posted 2000-10-06 08:12 PM


So romantic in candle light
This is a good un

Sometimes you have to let go and move on,
But never let go of the memories.


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2 posted 2000-10-06 08:21 PM


Sweet promises whispered by my sweet lips,
The light softly touch from my fingertips,
When they slide lightly all over your skin,
Feeling the vibration that comes from within.

My fingertips that caress you softly and sweet,
Searching their way goin slowly beneath,
Sweet sensual smooches so softly and fine,
My tongue that meet yours passionately entwine.

Trembeling lightly while that we explore,
Satisfy the desire longing for more,
with every touch we feel the temptation,
losing control so tense in anticipation.

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WOW and WHEW!!!!!
my my my I love this poem ...
sensually delish...
imagery rich ...
and your cadence and rhyme are dead on time
EXCELLENT work here..
the candle imagery is perfect...
and the building intensity is written to poetic completion ...
just fantastic poetry
putting this candle dance in my file
take care
jm

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3 posted 2000-10-06 08:47 PM


Charisma, Hi, wow this is so beautifully romantic.... Well Done  
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4 posted 2000-10-07 06:10 AM


Maria Byrne: thank you  

Janet Marie: thank you for your wonderful comment, I am glad that you like this one  

Dark Angel: thank you, I'm glad that you like it.

tracie66
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5 posted 2000-10-07 06:13 AM


WoW!!!
Charisma this piece is sooo sensual, you have given great imagery here...well done
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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6 posted 2000-10-07 09:17 AM


"AWESOME" I love whispering and when it is backed up by candlelight well....what could be more romantic and loving?  Beautifully "awesome" piece.
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7 posted 2000-10-07 03:26 PM


Tracie: thank you, using imagination is sometimes enough....

Mark: than we have something in common....love whispering by candlelight too.......thank you for your reply

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8 posted 2000-10-07 03:42 PM


Holy Moley
knock my socks off!  How romantic !


Kathleen


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9 posted 2000-10-07 06:57 PM


Irish Rose: thank you hon....
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10 posted 2000-10-07 07:16 PM


this is the second or third poem i've read by you and i'm absolutely amazed that english isn't your primary language...

you write/comment/& use the language with the skill of someone who knows it very well  

i don't know if you saw my question on one of your other poems, but if you didn't, i'll repeat it here... what is your native language??

thanks for sharing.      

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11 posted 2000-10-08 07:33 AM


Pandora: thank your reading my poems and your comment, I hope that you like it a bit.

and I wish that my english was that good, I know that I miss the little things that make a poem so delightful.

to answer your question, I live in the Netherlands so my native tongue is dutch, but I am not from origine Dutch...come from Indonesia and speak that language either.

hope that this answerred your question.  

Charisma

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