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BloomingRose
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0 posted 2000-10-05 10:55 PM


Once Upon A Love Song


A song you sing, a delicious melody
is a once upon a love song...
it's clear to  hear the intrigue of things

Ears burn, passion rings
I place my hands over my ears
the beat of this drum is too loud

Eyes closed, waiting for the sound to subside
I lay my head on your chest
let me just rest
sing it slow and low please


BloomingRose



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Aimster
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1 posted 2000-10-05 11:52 PM


Eyes closed, waiting for the sound to subside
I lay my head on your chest
let me just rest
sing it slow and low please

powerful and intriguing. this tells a story all on its own. very nice work!
take care.
amy  

"The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences"


Mark Bohannan
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2 posted 2000-10-06 01:53 AM


Sometimes a love can be too intense and all you can do is to trust the one that loves you and just let them hold you and comfort you in quiet.  Those quiet times can be the truely memorable ones anyway...the ones of closeness,trust, and of course peaceful comfort.  Excellent penning from you.
tracie66
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3 posted 2000-10-06 02:54 AM


Classical Words BR a most lovely and delightful read.
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Charisma
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4 posted 2000-10-06 03:10 AM


love your song, and it remind me on the strong feelings that love can give.
thank you for sharing it

Charisma

BloomingRose
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5 posted 2000-10-06 08:56 AM


Amy~ I guess we all have a story to tell. A lifetime of memories that come and go. Glad you liked this one.  


Mark~ Quiet times are the comforting factor in an intense drama.
Thanks for reading my friend.

Tracie~ Glad you enjoyed. I appreciate your view of this as a classical write.
Nice compliment. Thank you.

Charisma~ Life is a song indeed. Thanks for reading    
btw, Charisma is a really lovely name. Your mom did well in choosing that one.

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2000-10-06 05:42 PM


taking it slow makes it all the more intense
sometimes quiet comfort can be more passionate than high flames ...
lovely melodies youve penned
take care
jm

Sunshine
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7 posted 2000-10-06 05:47 PM


Excellent...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



juliet_2u
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8 posted 2000-10-06 06:52 PM


Wow, this was just wow girl. Can you tell I liked it?...lol
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