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Beyond the Looking Glass |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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Beyond the Looking Glass Beware the circus mirror glaze, Where truth is warped ... perception hazed. For 'tis the vision there beheld, But one dimension, depth withheld? What lies beyond the falsity, Presented there for all to see? Beyond the glass, reflected clear, Are answers if you choose to peer; For in it's panes, a mirror holds, The hidden truths, as gaze unfolds. Through eyes familiar, looking back, Be not afraid ... do not drawback; Beyond the false facade portrayed, 'Tis truth and wisdom to be weighed. Seek low beneath the surface sheen, To try discover ... dare to dream. /Kit McCallum |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, yes, Kit, we should always look a little closer than we really do! Talking to a dreamer here! Good one! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What terrific words of wisdom this one holds! This is a wonderful style for you, Kit. You may fool the whole world Down your pathway of years And get pats on the back as you pass But your final reward Will be heartaches and tears If you cheated the man in the glass. |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
Great poem. We could all do to perform a little self analysis, and what better place to start then a mirror. Even in the darkest night, someone will be there holding a candle for you. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
This is great. I wish I would have thought of those first lines!!! Ok, the whole poem, but that just seemed so greedy to say!!! I really love it. Very nice work. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now this is one for the books...and my library of course. Not only is the cadence and flow perfect but the content is so deeply drawn on truth and taunts us to really look at who we are and those around us. Excellent read and now placing on the shelf in my library where it will gather NO dust. Loved it my friend. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
kit- this is awesome! i just love it.  it speaks to the heart of the dreamer in me. Thanks for sharing this. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
This one is definitely one of your best. You can fool others but you can never fool yourself (at least not for very long) Poetic perfection here Wise man say "Those who live in the past let the future sneak up on them" and "Make each moment count, it could be your last" |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Awsome Kit....truly!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is really all so true. I enjoyed reading it. Kathleen |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Kit, there is much wisdom and truth in your words! This is a very thought-proving poem! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
very nice ... great tempo and phrasing ... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
A lot of thought below the surface of our reflection ... there is a whole other side that we seldom take the time to notice Well done Kit |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kit A wonderful verse, simply perfect in every way. Though I could never have written this, I'm proud of you, my twin. Mark said it best. Liz |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Kit~ This piece is a treasure, wonderful writings thanks for sharing Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is excellent, Kit! Very well done! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The title drew me in as I love Alice In Wonderland....the poem most certainly did not disapoint *applauds a well deserved poem* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey now....look at Kit rock... superb cadence and rhythm here girlie.. wonderful read outloud.. and very cool perspective in the poem .... wisdom and truth laced in rhyme great vocab choices as well... like this stlye .. you wear it well my friend ... later-looking-glass-gator jm |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kit this is superb, an excellant poem and I really love it. Lovely flow and I think one of your best. Marsha |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
WOW! I'm way behind saying thanks to everyone ... sorry! ~Karilea: From one dreamer to another ... thank you for these sweet words Karilea, I really appreciate you! ~Balladeer: I'm glad you enjoyed this style on me Michael ... your poetic response was positively perfect, and summed these thoughts up so poignantly ... wonderful! Thank you! ~Der Keit: Thank you for these words ... I sometimes do a little "too" much self-analysis Der Keit, LOL! ~Seraphin: ROFL ... thanks so much seraphin, I loved your comment! ~Mark: Thank you so much for the comment on the flow Mark, I love to know it reads well in that fashion, and am more than pleased to be on your shelf! ~Vicky: You're welcome Vicky, and thanks so much for enjoying and commenting! ~Jeffrey: Thanks so much for the "poetic perfection" Jeffrey, sigh ... it's true we can't fool ourselves for long! ~English Rose: Thank you so much for the "awesome" english Rose ... I very much appreciate you reading! ~Irish Rose: I'm so glad you enjoyed Irish Rose ... it's nice to know it holds some truths for all ... ~Debbie: Oh, I love it when someone says "thought-provoking" Debbie, that does mean a lot to me ... thanks so much! ~Maureen: Thank you for enjoying the tempo and phrasing Maureen ... I very much appreciate these wonderful words! ~Rex: So much below the surface is so true ... like looking into a pond (thought you might like that analogy), there's a whole other world unfolding beneath the surface ... thanks so much Rex! ~Liz: My dear twin, you could and have, written this and more ... thank you so much for these heartening words, you know I very much appreciate them! ~Tracie: Thank you so much for the "treasure" Tracie, indeed, looking into the glass is like finding a buried treasure sometimes! ~Denise: I'm always so glad when you stop in Denise ... thanks so much for the "excellent" my friend! ~Ruth: Oh, I loved Alice in Wonderland too Ruth ... I'm glad I didn't disappoint, and thank you very much for the applause! ~Janet Marie: It's so good to have you here JM ... and thanks so much for commenting on so many facets, I just love to hear your vantage as always! And you know I loved the later-gator ... thanks JM! ~Marsha: Oh Marsha, thanks so very much ... this means a great deal to me, I'm very grateful for these kind words! With much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
"Beyond the glass, reflected clear, Are answers if you choose to peer; For in it's panes, a mirror holds, The hidden truths, as gaze unfolds" Fabulous writing! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit~ Reflections of truth unfold - if we look beyond the image into the soul. Thanks for sharing this lovely, thought-provoking piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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