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kaile
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0 posted 2000-10-05 01:57 PM


Struck by Athena's arrow,
an aspiring poet gleefully
took his pen to hand,
his emotions sparkling
free on the paper,
laid bare for all to see

Yet his works were labelled as drivel
his expressions despised as cliches
his thoughts disregarded as juvenile

He seeks neither praise nor admiration
but just a willingness
to peek into
the complexities
of his inner world

His last resort to be heard failed,
he bade farewell to his muse

Sinking into obscurity,
never to be heard again

© Copyright 2000 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
Moon Dust
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1 posted 2000-10-05 02:01 PM


awwww that poor man

There are enough colours in the world,
To paint your own dreams,
You won't get them,
Till you try.


inot2B
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2 posted 2000-10-05 02:25 PM


I can tell that you do not write about yourself. You will be around for a long
long time.
Very Good

angelswing
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3 posted 2000-10-05 03:41 PM


Nice one, I hope you talk not of yourself as you are a most talented poet . You have got your point across well, and I loved the way it flowed .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

Parker
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4 posted 2000-10-05 04:49 PM


Never listen to the nay sayers or the big head critics. Most don't write poetry we can understand, they write cryptography and there's never an enigma machine around when you need to read it.
Oh, by the way you write wonderful drivel.  

Parker

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-10-06 10:45 AM


K, my apologies for taking so long to get here ...
thank you for letting me know my words
inspired a poetic process ...
and I must second and Ditto Parker' wise
words ...(hes so smart)  

we may never become famous or be published..
but our words and poetry touch someone somewhere along the way ...
and by that our poetry become engraved on their hearts ...
thats good enough for me....
this work from you here is proof of the
gift of poetry...we inspire each other ...
no price or fame can add to that gift.
very creative angle you'v presented here
very nice job K,
ya better be careful ... someone might think your a poet  
later-yournotdeadyet-gator LOL
jm

Trew
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6 posted 2000-10-06 10:46 AM


Uh-huh... been there!
As a matter of fact, it hit me so hard that I wrote for years, allowing nobody to read my work.  A few select friends read a few select poems, but that was all.
Then, I realized that it was not as important to have my poetry read, as it was to have my poetry written.  If others enjoy it, fine.  If not, then that's fine too.
Yours, by the way, was enjoyed by me.
Good post, good poem!

Trev.

LngJhnAg
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7 posted 2000-10-07 01:17 PM


Is this a poem about Toerag???  Pretty heavy sentiments here.
kaile
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8 posted 2000-10-09 05:02 AM


ohhh,you all are toooo kind...

i dont really consider myself a poet but sometimes i feel this urge to pen down my thoughts--thats about it

is this a poem about Toerag??im afraid i dont know whos Toreag...may LJA kindly explain to this frog-in-well

tracie66
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9 posted 2000-10-09 05:13 AM


Kaile~
Poet or no poet this is very good but the sad part was this:

His last resort to be heard failed,
he bade farewell to his muse

Sinking into obscurity,
never to be heard again

To me the greatest gift is poetry, words that we have expressed our feelings with
...well done Kaile
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Charisma
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10 posted 2000-10-09 06:12 AM


I'll hear you too,
and I like this poem either,
hope it's not you,
we need our pen, to make our hearts lighter.



Charisma

kaile
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11 posted 2000-10-10 01:26 AM


i didnt have time to mention this the other time but yes, jm you are right..the gift of poetry is to help others to see, to reflect ,to inspire like never before..i thank you for your poem which has in some terms made me think long and hard ...and thats why i like passions so much.....

thank you all

brian madden
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12 posted 2000-10-14 12:56 PM


Kaile, firstly a quote " regard all art critics as useless and dangerous." NOw Ditto what Jan said, no being lazy but she nailed what I wanted to say perfectly, though I would like to make a request that you write a poem called "growth of a great poet"
because my friend that is what you are, our poetry will never stop improving refining growing. rememeber a bad poem is a souless poem if you don't believe in what you write then the poem no matter how well written will be a bad poem. So continue to dazzle and pen your beautiful poems.  

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

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13 posted 2001-12-05 06:54 PM


That is so cruel!
To be un-appreciated for the things he put so much effort into, the things that he was so proud of. That is INDEED cruel.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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14 posted 2003-01-27 09:28 AM


geez, that's hard
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