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I Have Nothing |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA 
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I have no woman's eye to view, the world the way it looks to you. I have not the lady's heart to feel, our life and love the way you will. I have no philiosopher's mind to know, the complexities of life if you should go. I have merely this haunted shell, this empty vessel of masculine hell. I have nothing save this foolish pride, which leaves me scorched and black inside. I have only thirst unquenched and aching want, in labrynthian heart and self-loathing's haunt. I have no life nor love nor care, if I have not you to guide me there. I have nothing, without you. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP Most people would rather die than think; in fact, they do so. B. Russell |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
this is good, it is reality, some might try to paint it prettier, but when you lose someone special...life ain't pretty ...good writing  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I have nothing save this foolish pride, which leaves me scorched and black inside." Wow! Powerfully written JP! The level of emotions drawn out in the piece are deeply touching. Your comparisons used show the stark contrast in perceptions ... you've described them so vividly. Really well done! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-05-2000).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
JP, I am a woman who works in a typically masculine field...being masculine doesn't mean that you can't see things or feel things. It's all up to you...and the way you've written this poem, you're well on the way to understanding. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Okay...back again...grin... and I'll go out on the proverbial "limb" just to say, this is sweet, and yes, DAMMIT, SENSITIVE....sounds like you have a full appreciation for what you have--and obviously, you are practicing what you preach. Bravo, JP. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Well written poem...and I have to say I love your signature...too true! If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Thanks y'all mucho appreciato. Serenity - no more fear eh?  Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP Most people would rather die than think; in fact, they do so. B. Russell |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh yes you do.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, but you are so blessed, because an empty shell has all of the room in the world for beauty and love. Many don't. Kathleen |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You may think you have nothing sometimes. But you always have your family's love, your talent and your friends here. This is another gem from you!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
JP this was a sensitive piece here. These are words any women would want to hear JP. I have no life nor love nor care, if I have not you to guide me there. I have nothing, without you. <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Hehehehe, I guess all women do want to hear those words... made the mistake of reciting this poem on my wife's voicemail, all her coworkers heard it and now they all want a peice... Oh, the trials we perfect men have to go through sometimes.... Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP Most people would rather die than think; in fact, they do so. B. Russell |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JP~ When you give of yourself in sincerity - you have need of nothing more. 'I have no life nor love nor care, if I have not you to guide me there.' Bet she loved it too ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
When you love someone the heart lives and breathes for that someone. We can have hope for tomorrow no matter what it holds, if we choose too. Good write from the heart. deb |
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