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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-10-04 11:38 PM


Maybe I need a change of scenery;
Perhaps it’s just this sheet of paper.
It could very well be
The lines I’ve vowed
To stay within;
It never crossed my mind
That my world could be the cause
Of this impasse.
Baby, when you’re around,
The words could never cease to flow.
But I’ve restricted myself
By allowing inspiration
To illustrate itself
Only within the requirements I’ve set.
I’m deathly afraid
Of using all of the pretty stationery.
So, instead,
I find it years later,
Yellowed, at the bottom of a box
In the back of my closet,
Where I’ve also hidden
My most precious limitations.
This heart needs release;
I could take no more boundaries.
I’m standing alone,
Face to the sky,
Arms outstretched,
In the downpour of this affirmed negativity.
The jukebox plays every song of desperation
It can possibly find;
I keep feeding it quarters.
How can I complain
When I’ve been the one
Giving continuity to this obstruction?


Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2000-10-05 01:06 AM


snowpants.... sometimes it is hard to let go, I understand that   I loved your poem  
passing shadows
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2 posted 2000-10-05 02:31 AM


can I relate to this one! I'm sure now we think the same way about some things...
Waverly917
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3 posted 2000-10-05 02:27 PM


Go ahead, erase your lines of limitation!  Great poem.

Abra

"So often times it happens that we live our lives in chains
And we never even know we have the key."
-Already Gone, The Eagles

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4 posted 2000-10-05 09:35 PM


Sometimes we need the impetus to know when to cross that line...

this was very thought provoking...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



snowpants
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5 posted 2000-10-06 12:45 PM


Dark Angel:  yes, it is, but sometimes, to get on with life, we must.  Glad you liked!

passing shadows:  thanks for reading and assuring me I'm not the only one who sees things this way!  

Abra:  I think I just might!  Thanks!

Sunshine:  yes, and that's exactly what came over me last night when I wrote this.  I even wrote on a different type of paper than I normally write on.  it was quite an experience for someone who is such a slave to tradition!  glad you could get something out of it!!

sp  


Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

Mark Bohannan
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6 posted 2000-10-06 03:10 AM


Sometimes there just can't be a winner in it all as it says in your title.  You still got to play the game but you also have to know when to accept that victory will come another day and then go out and find where the next game will begin.  Wonderful verse worth much contemplation.
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7 posted 2000-10-06 07:05 AM


SnowPants~
This is a simply marvelous write !

'I’m deathly afraid
Of using all of the pretty stationery.
So, instead,
I find it years later,
Yellowed, at the bottom of a box
In the back of my closet,
Where I’ve also hidden
My most precious limitations.'


Sometimes ya' just gotta color outside the lines.

What a wonderful ponder !
I like it.
~*Marge*~




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snowpants
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8 posted 2000-10-06 11:35 PM


Mark:  you are absolutely right.  I'm glad you liked it.  Thanks!!

Marge:  well, thank you for your kind words!!  and, for control freaks, such as I, it's no small feat to color outside the lines!  glad you enjoyed!!

sp  


Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

Janet Marie
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9 posted 2000-10-07 01:55 AM


this is a very well expressed reflection...
written from places deep inside ..
excellent use of metaphor and emotional imagery.
i related to way too much of this...
most times...~we~ are our own worst enemy..

I also read your other post tonite...
very impressive ..
take care
jm

snowpants
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10 posted 2000-10-07 02:01 AM


Well, thank you very much, Janet!  It's a great honor to get such compliments from a fellow poet!

sp

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