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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Whispering I heard something last night It seemed like a call from nowhere And still it managed to swallow me To depths to a certain familiar land Now voices seemed to fill in spaces I wonder why I left that void To hear some whisper as night falls Unlike the others dreaming sweet So I am captured and who's set free And who's to figure where there'll be These whispers of a weary past That cling to souls of painful hearts I live with them while you pass on Yet sometimes something’s find their way So till then sleep for I can hear but what when I'm awake and call Would you hear me...But I sighed? |
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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
Why do any of us leave that void? You have expressed your ache beautifully. Take care. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Now voices seemed to fill in spaces I wonder why I left that void To hear some whisper as night falls Unlike the others dreaming sweet So I am captured and who's set free And who's to figure where there'll be These whispers of a weary past That cling to souls of painful hearts I live with them while you pass on ==================== but what when I'm awake and call Would you hear me...But I sighed? ===================== oh man... you know I love this one ..right? awesome deep poem my friend ... a beautiful poetic whisper from you ... bittersweet, honest, reflections. so good to have you back posting. this lil gem goes in my library file. take care gentle poet jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
AVANTI--JM said it so well...you have written your heart...and it is bittersweet well done. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thank you Jlocke for reading deep... And Janet for reading from your heart that always sees more for me... thanx pal((((((hug)))))) Martie...thanx for the kind and encouraging words... If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
WOW!! I am not sure i can explain what this poem did to me....(in a good way) its really outstanding....  GE |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Greeneyes...thankyou for reading and I'm glad you liked it If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
sometimes I feel like that, but you've said it beauifully There are enough colours in the world, To paint your own dreams, You won't get them, Till you try. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx for reading and understanding If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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