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rosepetals25
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0 posted 10-03-2000 12:48 PM       View Profile for rosepetals25   Email rosepetals25   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for rosepetals25

I Can Still....

I can still hear your voice
Cutting through the crowd
I can still hear your laughter
Echoing through the room
I can still feel your touch
In the cold lonely night
I can still feel your breath
As you whisper what I long to hear
I can still feel the warmth
Of your body next to mine
I can still feel my tears
As I long to say good bye



~~Tara aka rp25

[This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (edited 10-03-2000).]
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1 posted 10-03-2000 01:28 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Tara--sad but eloquently sweet, speaks perfectly of the ghost of memory...I enjoyed this much!
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2 posted 10-03-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Tara - lemme get this straight - you can still feel all those things, and you are still gonna dump him???  This must be a poem about either Balladeer or Toerag, because they are definitely the most dumpable.  I like the repition you used in this poem, and the way you turned the tables at the end by becoming the dumper instead of the dumpee.  
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serenity - Thank you   I'm glad you stopped in.

LngJhnAg - Hmmm.. I re-read my poem with new eyes after I read your reply.. I didn't write that with that in mind.. but know I can understand.  I am not dumping anyone.. let me assure you  .  
Thank you for stopping in.  



~~Tara aka rp25 :o)
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4 posted 11-12-2000 02:14 AM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

RosePetals, I read this poem and I like it very much...

"I can still feel my tears as I long to say goodbye"....   nice choice of words PoetFriend

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5 posted 11-12-2000 02:57 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I can still hear your laughter
Echoing through the room
I can still feel your touch
In the cold lonely night
I can still feel your breath
As you whisper what I long to hear
================
RP Im so glad Coco brought this back up ..
im sorry to have missed it before..I try to watch for yours...
we've outgrown the forums I think..
I cant seem to keep up ...
this is a sincere, tender, piece from you.
so much emotion expressed well in a few
well chosen lines.
its beauty is in its bittersweet melancoly
well done poet girlie  
take care
jm
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6 posted 11-12-2000 12:03 PM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

RP...such a tender touching piece.
Mark Bohannan
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I read of a search for closure in this and I hope that if that is what you are seeking then you find it.  If I am mistaken then I guess with a little explanation from you I can read it again and retrain my overworked peanut of a brain.lol...tenderly written no matter what and you know I will be back to re-read both the poem and your response. Hugs my friend.
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CocoBaci - Thank you for repling.  I have to say I was surprised when I checked my mail and saw a notice from passions...lol.  I'm glad you liked it.

Janet - Thank you. To know you keep a look out for my name is very flattering.  You haven't missed much recently.. here late I haven't been writing   But I am hoping that changes... Anyway..lol.. thank you for stopping in.  I'm glad you liked it.

Paula - Thank you also for your nice words  

Mark - Well.. I'm not sure what I was thinking when I wrote this.  I was thinking of a past relationship that I thought I had closure in.  I saw my ex that day.. and this is what came out.  I have no desire to be with him... I am very much in love with my soul mate.. even it this poem seems to be saying different..lol.    Did that help at all?  Thank you for stopping in  



~~Tara aka rp25 :o)
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I read your explanation to Mark and that helped me a lot ...I think this is a very tender reflection and it pours from the heart ..I enjoyed the read very much...ethome
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ethome -  I'm glad my explanation helped   And I'm glad you liked it.. thanks for stopping by.

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enjoyed it a lot!!!!!!!
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RP25~ after I read the explanation, then read the poem again, I think I understood.......kinda just looking into the past without feeling it.....I liked this a lot   -SEA
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vadana - I'm glad you liked it  

SEA - That is about what it was.. remembering the pain I once felt maybe. I dont't know..lol.  I do know that I'm glad you stopped in and that you enjoyed it. Thank you  

~~Tara aka rp25 :o)
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14 posted 11-14-2000 04:08 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Wonderful piece RP, and I read it just like LJ.  How bout something for the last line line like.....

"I can still feel my tears
As you said I'm your's till I die"

just a thought...

jwesley

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jwesley - Thank you for suggestion   And for stopping in.



~~Tara aka rp25 :o)
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