I can still hear your voice Cutting through the crowd I can still hear your laughter Echoing through the room I can still feel your touch In the cold lonely night I can still feel your breath As you whisper what I long to hear I can still feel the warmth Of your body next to mine I can still feel my tears As I long to say good bye
~~Tara aka rp25
[This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (edited 10-03-2000).]
Tara - lemme get this straight - you can still feel all those things, and you are still gonna dump him??? This must be a poem about either Balladeer or Toerag, because they are definitely the most dumpable. I like the repition you used in this poem, and the way you turned the tables at the end by becoming the dumper instead of the dumpee.
LngJhnAg - Hmmm.. I re-read my poem with new eyes after I read your reply.. I didn't write that with that in mind.. but know I can understand. I am not dumping anyone.. let me assure you . Thank you for stopping in.
I can still hear your laughter Echoing through the room I can still feel your touch In the cold lonely night I can still feel your breath As you whisper what I long to hear ================ RP Im so glad Coco brought this back up .. im sorry to have missed it before..I try to watch for yours... we've outgrown the forums I think.. I cant seem to keep up ... this is a sincere, tender, piece from you. so much emotion expressed well in a few well chosen lines. its beauty is in its bittersweet melancoly well done poet girlie take care jm
I read of a search for closure in this and I hope that if that is what you are seeking then you find it. If I am mistaken then I guess with a little explanation from you I can read it again and retrain my overworked peanut of a brain.lol...tenderly written no matter what and you know I will be back to re-read both the poem and your response. Hugs my friend.
CocoBaci - Thank you for repling. I have to say I was surprised when I checked my mail and saw a notice from passions...lol. I'm glad you liked it.
Janet - Thank you. To know you keep a look out for my name is very flattering. You haven't missed much recently.. here late I haven't been writing But I am hoping that changes... Anyway..lol.. thank you for stopping in. I'm glad you liked it.
Paula - Thank you also for your nice words
Mark - Well.. I'm not sure what I was thinking when I wrote this. I was thinking of a past relationship that I thought I had closure in. I saw my ex that day.. and this is what came out. I have no desire to be with him... I am very much in love with my soul mate.. even it this poem seems to be saying different..lol. Did that help at all? Thank you for stopping in
~~Tara aka rp25 :o)
New Brunswick Canada