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Kethry
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0 posted 2000-10-03 07:26 AM


it started with a prayer
a whisper to the moonlight and then
without conscious thought,
the shadow you cast,
fills my sight,
shades of gray
running like fingers across my thigh,
I'd try to hide, turn away,
but your shadow grows..........
becomes the obsession I am terrified of,
knowing you will be there overshadows my life
scaring me to death
your whispers in the darkness
your caresses, leave cold scars on my hip
and yet..........
I seek your touch, as I have sought you,
through winters frosted scent,
through days and nights bent,
with unrest,
unease the breeze
I feel, are you real?
or merely another dreamscape,
to walk on lonely afternoons,
and soon..........
its over
reduced to tears am I
the walks are done the dreamscape fades
and all I have are memories
and whispers in moonlight



"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

© Copyright 2000 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-10-03 07:32 AM


WOW......when you ain't pirate bashing you really pour out the soul don't ya????  Excellent read here my friend. Powerful lines below.

but your shadow grows..........
becomes the obsession I am terrified of,
knowing you will be there overshadows my life
scaring me to death
your whispers in the darkness
your caresses, leave cold scars on my hip
and yet..........
I seek your touch, as I have sought you,
through winters frosted scent,
through days and nights bent,
with unrest,
unease the breeze

tracie66
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2 posted 2000-10-03 07:35 AM


Kethry~
WOW...this is a wonderful piece of work, very enjoyable read.
I've been there, very confusing at times.
Great work....well done
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-10-03 08:50 AM


Keth,
may I ditto what Mark said..
and add I love this poem ...
so many emotions ...
you run the gambit from sensual to haunted.
wonderful expression and writing here
i like seeing this side of your poetry
take care
jm

Sunnyone
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4 posted 2000-10-03 08:55 AM



Oh my.....there's not much more that I could add to the masters above me, except that this is a very powerfully written work. I always enjoy each piece you do, but this one has a special pull!!  


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Sunshine
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5 posted 2000-10-03 09:56 AM


Kethry, this is how I like to see you write...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


rosepetals25
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6 posted 2000-10-03 12:39 PM


Kethry,

    Wow.. haunting.. sensual..  sad.  Excellent writing! Greatly enjoyed

~~Tara aka rp25 :o)

Kethry
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7 posted 2000-10-03 04:14 PM


Thanks - this was a little different for me, I have a good friend who says my free verse is better.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2000-10-03 04:30 PM


"I feel, are you real"?
Have felt this so many times
and usually not a good sign for me.
James

Kethry
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9 posted 2000-10-03 04:44 PM


jmlee12345. - Not a good sign for me either.
Thanks for responding.
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

LngJhnAg
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10 posted 2000-10-03 05:00 PM


Kethry

Terrific imagery - and your emotions are laid right out where we can feel them, too.  Wonderful free verse.  I hope it really is all behind you now.

Kethry
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11 posted 2000-10-03 05:06 PM


LJA the only thing behind me is you...and it scares me half to death.
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

SEA
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with you
12 posted 2000-10-03 07:12 PM


Kethry~ Wow!!   I enjoyed this very much!   -SEA
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13 posted 2000-10-03 07:38 PM


Kethry, when you're bad, you're good....but, when you're good, you're great! This is exceptional writing...


(it's not really about a kangaroo, is it?   )

Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 2000-10-03 07:44 PM


A Superb piece
You carry  us along with your emitions
Very well written
Liz

SpitFire
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15 posted 2000-10-03 09:12 PM


~Kethry,...I love the honest and open flow this has to it....it's like your words are flying free from you...coming as they do to your mind,...I love that. A rawness to it that captivates my attention. Superb expression. Take care of yourself K. *Peace.
Wilfred Yeats
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16 posted 2000-10-03 09:18 PM


You've read me - exuding my confidence - and professing my love and romantic feelings - Perhaps others doing similar - Speaking for myself - you should know the selfsame doubts and anguish can haunt me as well - and I strongly suspect others as well - perhaps even the object of my affection - BUT you've put it into words - and most beautifully.
Kethry
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17 posted 2000-10-04 05:02 AM


Thanks everyone, for the praise, which I feel I only half deserve. Thanks
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

fool
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18 posted 2000-10-04 09:03 PM


fool foats in on a cloud,glides down,and lands next to a startled Kethry.
"Sensual,haunting,yearning,you have captured all these emotions in this piece Keth,well written"

Kethry
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19 posted 2000-10-05 03:22 AM


Fool
Kethry turns a whiter shade of pale and looks just ghostly in the moonlight, now who's haunting who.  

Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Marsha
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20 posted 2000-10-05 04:59 AM


Kethry, this is very powerful, I really like this. Your work is extraordinary always but this is something beyond, very well written.
                     Marsha
                


[This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 10-05-2000).]

MMoonchild
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21 posted 2000-10-05 05:25 AM


this one got to me...as I wipe  a tear from my cheek...
~~soft hugs Kethry
Maureen

Kethry
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22 posted 2000-10-05 04:38 PM


Marsha and Maureen,
Soft thanks
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

TerryW
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23 posted 2000-10-05 05:23 PM


Kethry~
     My dear, this is beautiful!  I love the imagery that you used in this one!  Moonlight always intensifies the mood, dear!



Love Ya~

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

peppermint35
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24 posted 2000-10-29 10:32 AM


I admire your work so well; I just had to pull this one out and read it!!!  And it was well worth it...this is absolutely...I simply don't have the words...wonderful, haunting, but definitely captivating and electrifying!!!!

Thanks for the lesson

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Kit McCallum
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25 posted 2000-10-29 10:37 AM


Wow! Sorry I missed this earlier Kethrey ... what a beautiful, breath-taking piece, wonderful wording and flow!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Gentle Spirit
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26 posted 2000-10-29 10:45 AM


Kethry, beautifully emotional writing.  I could feel the heartbeat, the pull, the tears.  Well done!!  
Paula Finn
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27 posted 2000-10-30 12:16 PM


Keth...girl you just rip the heart right out of me with this...exquisite
Toddles
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28 posted 2000-10-30 01:45 AM


Eloquently executed... Great read!


"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind!"...Dr. Seuss

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nakdthoughts
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29 posted 2000-10-30 06:25 AM


I saw this  quote the other day, Kethry and saved it wanting to use it's idea and your poem made me think to share it with you.

"I wasn't kissing him, I was whispering in his mouth."  It was the Whispers of his touch...

~Wynter Bliss


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".

...Pope John Paul II


Charisma
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30 posted 2000-10-30 06:43 AM


*wow*...you have openend your heart and soul....and shared your feelings with all of us......great imagery.....excellent penned.

(hugs)
Charisma

Kethry
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31 posted 2000-10-31 03:51 AM


Thanks everyone,
this is one of my favourites. I think because my muse and I collaborated closely on this one. Either that or my split personality has got loose again.

NakdThoughts: Thanks I'm keeping the quote. Do you want to make something of it  
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Sudhir Iyer
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32 posted 2000-10-31 05:13 AM


I seek your touch, as I have sought you,
through winters frosted scent,
through days and nights bent,
with unrest,
unease the breeze
I feel, are you real?
or merely another dreamscape,
to walk on lonely afternoons,
and soon..........
its over
reduced to tears am I
the walks are done the dreamscape fades
and all I have are memories
and whispers in moonlight
.......

WOW, amazing work, Kethry, my friend...

Regards,
Sudhir
P.S. I know I have been missing some way beyond excellent poetry here....

Elizabeth Santos
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33 posted 2000-10-31 05:13 AM


Wonderful poetry here, from shadows to dreamscapes

"I seek your touch, as I have sought you,
through winters frosted scent,
through days and nights bent,"

Loved these lines

Liz



Kethry
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34 posted 2000-10-31 06:18 AM


Sudhir, Sudhir, beloved one.It's good to have you back here where you belong.

Liz, thanks for the response.

Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Beth
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35 posted 2000-10-31 06:52 AM


~Wow..this is stunning...!!~

~Cherie~

Kethry
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36 posted 2000-10-31 07:13 AM


Beth,
high praise from you, thanks.
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Martie
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37 posted 2000-11-03 02:24 PM


Exceptional writing, Kethry..emotionally compelling and well written!
CocoBaci
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38 posted 2000-11-03 02:44 PM


Kethry, what can I say that our PoetFriends have not already said but to let ya know this one you've written reaches into the depths of this reader's soul...

My compliments to you for such an exquisite write one I shall keep around for a while

Smiles2UPoetFriend
Coco

Nate Dogg
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39 posted 2000-11-03 03:45 PM


This piece is very beautiful and very powerful...excellent work and great imagery!

Nathan

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