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Turn Out The Lights |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Turn Out the Lights it will be, when it's time you'll know the sound it will be the whisper soft in your ear it will be in the soft caress that promises to fulfill your request with deepest sighs long ago lullabies of far-away symphonies there I'll begin to stroke your heart and those strings within shall flutter till in crescendo deafening and muscles quivering you'll sing back to me that's when I shall turn out the lights so you may replay the music of the night ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 1 October, 2000 |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Do I really have to tell you why I like this one my friend? Wow. . . I'm amazed that I still have my eyes after reading this one. . . Wonderful. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sven, of course you do! I mean, it was SO innocent....  Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"till in crescendo deafening and muscles quivering you'll sing back to me" Beautifully tender and romantic sentiments Karilea ... I loved the flow of your thoughts in this, wonderful!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
understated yes, inocent, definitely not. lol. I loved it. Keith W. Mullin Even in the darkest night, someone will be there holding a candle for you. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
with deepest sighs long ago lullabies of far-away symphonies there I'll begin to stroke your heart and those strings within shall flutter till in crescendo deafening and muscles quivering you'll sing back to me that's when I shall turn out the lights so you may replay the music of the night INNOCENT?????????? WELL maybe if I read it blind...lol.....actually my friend, there is innocense of the promise of two lovers in this one. I can see it in the beginning but then you sweep us away with wellllllll.....need I say it? it will be, when it's time you'll know the sound it will be the whisper soft in your ear it will be in the soft caress that promises to fulfill your request Excellent work my friend. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Gentle promises played to perfection - 'there I'll begin to stroke your heart and those strings within shall flutter' Lovely~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh....I get the feel of Phantom of the Opera with this one (by the way, my all time favorite musical) Very nicely done |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wow....the man you have in your thoughts must read this one....don't think that he would turn out the lights......*lol* I like this poem ....it is so exciting.... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Innocent...uh-huh! Lovely and thoughtfully done. If he hasn't seen it yet...sweep him away... j. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karilea, so that's innocent mmm? Right you are then, so that makes me as innocent as a kitten! Beautiful Karilea I do love this, it's so............... innocent! Take care Marsha  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Karilea, I feel I must respond to this one in person. Please e-mail me with your address and the best time to arrive  Needless to say, I LOVE IT!! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
"there I'll begin to stroke your heart" too many great lines and feelings in this to really pick just one, being in a ""softer"" mood today, i had to touch upon this as being my favorite feeling.... GE |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow, you folks are awesome! Thank you so much, everyone, for coming in to read this! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Karilea-Woah! There is some wonderful imagery here filled with love and passion, very nicely done. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
YOU - should have written the lyrics for Phantom ~G~ - Such Music of the Night as I imagine with your beautiful words - far exceeds any from Webber's lyricist |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Of course Karilea. . . I can see it now. . .such a playful innocence. . . how did I not see it before? -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gemini, thank you! Mr. Yeats...I have to admit that I secretly play my CD's of the opera in my car, with volume up loud enough to feel the bass in my bones...one of my favorites... Sven...you didn't miss it... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I agree with Mr. Yeats, your words sound like music to me! Very nice imagery, really enjoyed this! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Debbie, thank you, truly...now I can fly all day... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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