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Marsha
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0 posted 2000-10-01 12:02 PM


I can't decide on a title for this so please help me choose.

1. Burning Nights
2. Heated Honey
3. Tongues of Flame
4. Passions Flames

                        Passions flame
                        Fires burn
                        Heat rises
                        You and I

       Skin Caressing
       Bodies entwined
       Touching heaven
       Heat simmers

                         Breath gasps
                         Hearts pounding
                         Pulses hammer
                         Pleasure builds

       Hair tossed
       Arms enfold
       Fires quicken
       Blood races

                         Eyes dilated
                         Skin flushed
                         Mouths mesh
                         Bodies explode

       Soft sighs
       Breathing slows
       Bodies rest
       You and I

                          

                   Marsha


© Copyright 2000 Marsha Grace Melody Todd - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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1 posted 2000-10-01 12:21 PM


My dear friend, I don't believe you need any lessons at all.  You have a purpose behind each word and your style is you in every essence.  This is lovely and I would say judging by this that some lucky man out there is smiling mighty big this morning.  
Marsha
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2 posted 2000-10-01 01:44 PM


Mark my friend, you are always far too kind, I thank you for reading and understanding. I guess the man who I had in mind when I wrote this knows exactly how I feel. I was never very good at subtlty, maybe that's what I need lessons in.  Anyway I'll be here, as I said before kneeling at the feet of the master, so if you ever drop some crumbs of wisdom I can gather them up.

Take care
                Marsha
                          


Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-10-01 02:42 PM


Marsha..well ya can call me melted butter LOL
hot stuff mama-cita  
I personally like Passions Flames
for this ...
but then i just like the heat  
great read ...
jm

Ethan Halo
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on the roof again
4 posted 2000-10-01 02:48 PM


wowser! a i like the "stream of consciousness" style. a very direct perspective.
i think Burning Nights suits this one quite well  

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

Marsha
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5 posted 2000-10-01 03:48 PM


Janet thanks for the suggestion, and glad you like it. I do appreciate every single reply. It's being surrounded by such amazing talent, maybe I pick up a little stardust by a kind of osmosis.
Take care
                    Marsha
                           

Marsha
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6 posted 2000-10-01 03:52 PM


Ethan, I thank you for your comments, and so glad you like this.

                    Marsha
                    

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2000-10-01 03:59 PM


A vivid description of some "Heated Moments"
or I also like the title "You and I".
I realize these have not been offered for consideration so I apologize...James

Marsha
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8 posted 2000-10-01 04:04 PM


It's okay James any comments or suggestions gratefully received. Glad you stopped by to read this.
and I thank you for doing so.
                     Marsha

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