Open Poetry #10 |
Burning Nights (there's a choice of 4 titles help me choose please) |
Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
I can't decide on a title for this so please help me choose. 1. Burning Nights 2. Heated Honey 3. Tongues of Flame 4. Passions Flames Passions flame Fires burn Heat rises You and I Skin Caressing Bodies entwined Touching heaven Heat simmers Breath gasps Hearts pounding Pulses hammer Pleasure builds Hair tossed Arms enfold Fires quicken Blood races Eyes dilated Skin flushed Mouths mesh Bodies explode Soft sighs Breathing slows Bodies rest You and I Marsha |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My dear friend, I don't believe you need any lessons at all. You have a purpose behind each word and your style is you in every essence. This is lovely and I would say judging by this that some lucky man out there is smiling mighty big this morning. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend, you are always far too kind, I thank you for reading and understanding. I guess the man who I had in mind when I wrote this knows exactly how I feel. I was never very good at subtlty, maybe that's what I need lessons in. Anyway I'll be here, as I said before kneeling at the feet of the master, so if you ever drop some crumbs of wisdom I can gather them up. Take care Marsha |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Marsha..well ya can call me melted butter LOL hot stuff mama-cita I personally like Passions Flames for this ... but then i just like the heat great read ... jm |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
wowser! a i like the "stream of consciousness" style. a very direct perspective. i think Burning Nights suits this one quite well Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Janet thanks for the suggestion, and glad you like it. I do appreciate every single reply. It's being surrounded by such amazing talent, maybe I pick up a little stardust by a kind of osmosis. Take care Marsha |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethan, I thank you for your comments, and so glad you like this. Marsha |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A vivid description of some "Heated Moments" or I also like the title "You and I". I realize these have not been offered for consideration so I apologize...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
It's okay James any comments or suggestions gratefully received. Glad you stopped by to read this. and I thank you for doing so. Marsha |
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