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What The Sun Saw |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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What the Sun Saw There you stand, under sun so rare surveying the land within your care your head tilts to the meadowlark press on with work before the dark I bring to you a small repast to tide you through the noon I lay slight hand upon bronzed arm and a wink of promises, soon. Before I leave, I kiss your brow taste your salt of soul 'pon my lips you ask for the promise to be, now but my smile is all you sip. at the hour of four o'clock I come to take you in instead you catch me by the arm with taut hand, caress my chin Laying palm upon your face you take me in your strong embrace my head comes to your chest so strong we are where we both belong Gently now you lay me down upon broam and Indian grass and there below the autumn sun the remaining day shall pass ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 30 September, 2000 |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yes.........love in the afternoon!!!!! Loved this one, too......as I do all of yours........this one has a special touch!  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sunshine...oh yes to love your man no matter the where or the when |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Karilea, what a piece! (And on a Sunday morning!!) I enjoyed it much, though!  False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea - this is very sweet. Love in the afternoon sun, on the grass. How this reminds me of love in the summer sun. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Love like this in any season would be to take up the Autumn in passion's purity. What a wonderful vision I get from this. Now I know how I want my tomorrows to be spent. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I can say it no better than Mark: " Now I know how I want my tomorrows to be spent." Your Man is a lucky one indeed~S~ - OH and Did I Say? The poem is most beautiful ~G~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Karilea~ This beautiful poem of love, is a breath of *sunshine* Such powerful words and images in this, I love it  Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Before I leave, I kiss your brow taste your salt of soul 'pon my lips you ask for the promise to be, now but my smile is all you sip. at the hour of four o'clock I come to take you in instead you catch me by the arm with taut hand, caress my chin Laying palm upon your face you take me in your strong embrace my head comes to your chest so strong we are where we both belong Gently now you lay me down upon broam and Indian grass and there below the autumn sun the remaining day shall pass ====================== ya know ... this just became my fav of yours.. hands down winner ... simply poetic perfection sensually SUN-sational ... (hope ya enjoyed the sunburn) I know I did. excellent write gator girl jm |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karilea evry single one of your poems is a gem, a twenty four carrat diamond. This is so beautiful, hmmm Afternoon delight, yes Kari I can definetly recommend it. If nothing else love it conjures the muse wonderfully, oh and it brings a smile to your face. Take care Marsha (and I'll keep looking for you )[This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 10-01-2000).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Oh Sunshine, Your loving heart glistens in this trully beautiful work of art that WILL stand the test of time because it speeks of true love. I would love to be able to print this and keep it for myself as a reminder that there is such love in this world, I am in awe at this poem, thank you so much for sharing it with all. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
 ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow, folks, this kind of took on a life of its own... Sunny1, it's OK to come right out and say I'm touched...LOL... Paula, so right... Lovebug, oops for the Sunday post... LJA, just watch out for ticks... Mark, we all wish for your tomorrows to come to you as requested... Mr. Yeats, why thank you, he thinks so, too...  Melissa, you sweet thing, thank you... JM, a "fav" huh? Funny how I can read more than just one... Marsha, I keep finding these lumps of coal, but I'm glad you see the potential... Cerenity, your calling this "art" pleased my heart very, very much, thank you... Sven, perfect. Thank you! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ I can't imagine how I missed this lovely piece. It's exquisitely well written. Most lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Beautifully worded - just absolutely lovely! What a work of art and feelings! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is wonderful.. I enjoyed every last little ray of it....   |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oops, thought this had done the blue dive... Marge...they move so quickly, I don't cry if you miss it...but I'm giggling glad you found it...thanks! Rosemary, my friend, so good to see you here! Thank you so much for reading... Nan...when you come by to read, my day then becomes quite special, thank you... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
All I can say is that I truly loved it and I am in awe of your ability to portray simple moments in such a way...I'm happy I had a chance to read this one, it's special! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow, Deb, I'm overwhelmed! Are you in need of some personal Sunshine? Thank you so much for digging through my stuff, I am truly enjoying this bit of limelight! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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