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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2000-09-30 03:03 AM


easy darkness!
enrapturing~~
sickened silence,
songs don't sing...
a legate's ring...
that I, who once
held everything...
blew it
all away...
a wish
(I wish)
it all away...
I begged.
I pled.
I stayed to stay.
I live
forgive
another day,
and pray
my feet
will walk away...
and dance,
amongst
the sands...
I'll stay.

to be alive...
to breathe...
I pray,
and live,
to write
another day.




[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 09-30-2000).]

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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

1 posted 2000-09-30 04:06 AM


to be alive...
to breathe...
I pray,
and live,
to write
another day.

Oooh Wonderful writing Sista!!  

tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
2 posted 2000-09-30 04:21 AM


Serenity~
I'm with DA this is wonderful writings in deed  
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-09-30 05:24 AM


(I wish)
it all away...
I begged.
I pled.
I stayed to stay.
I live
forgive
another day,
and pray
my feet
will walk away...
and dance,
amongst
the sands...
I'll stay.
to be alive...
to breathe...
I pray,
and live,
to write
another day.


Hang in there dudette!!!  Powerful penning from you this morning.

brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
4 posted 2000-09-30 05:33 AM


to be alive...
to breathe...
I pray,
and live,
to write
another day.


POwerful poem and I believe we share a similar prayer.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

5 posted 2000-09-30 03:25 PM


Hugs for my Darlin' Dark Angel Sista!!!  thanks me girl...need to have a chat session soon, so you can tell me all about your trip...

tracie--a nice surprise it is to see you here...thank you so much for your reply, pop in again soon!

angelheart Mark---DUDETTE...lol...THAT'S PRICELESS!!!  I think that is a "first" for me..hugs to you and thanks...

brian---I'm always flattered by your replies, and yeppers, as they say, it's all about the writing afterall...thanks for reading...

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
6 posted 2000-09-30 04:08 PM


Serenity~
Makes me happy !
*Hugging* you across I-10 !
Love you.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2000-09-30 04:48 PM


Serenity,
Very nice, enjoyed the read.

Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
8 posted 2000-09-30 07:20 PM


              "to be alive...
               to breathe...
               I pray,
               and live,
               to write
               another day."

Sorry for copying the same lines as others, but this was just such lovely wording! I enjoyed the flow of the whole poem Serenity, very nicely written!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

9 posted 2000-09-30 11:31 PM


I stayed to stay.
I live
forgive
another day,
and pray
my feet
will walk away...
and dance,
amongst
the sands...
I'll stay.
to be alive...
to breathe...
I pray,
and live,
to write
another day.
=========================
yes you did
yes you will
yes you are
yes I am ... very very glad you stayed
VERY glad ...
did a lil happy dance ...
I said happy dance  ..NOT lap dance LOL
*blowing kisses to the south*
me loves ya
later-write-another-day-gator  
SO WRITE ALREADY...its tomorrow somewhere
hehe
me

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
10 posted 2000-10-01 12:06 PM


I like the angelheart btw----so if you are promising to stay and write where the heck is it?  I am having withdrawls here my friend.
Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
11 posted 2000-10-01 12:14 PM


i think my fav thing about all your poems is they way i always have to read them twice.
why?
there's so much trapped in-between the words and lines that i never catch on the first go round.
this one was no different. i think you made the right choice, and i'm glad you have your writing to compel you back.
as always, well penned.

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

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