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rosepetals25
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0 posted 2000-09-29 07:35 PM


A
Tear
Slowly
Slides down
My cheek as I sit
Here and think about
All the love that you have
Given to me.  What you have
Shared with me.. a love I never
Know could exist, let alone find in
My life.  You have given me a warmth
I can feel inside this once lonely and cold
Heart. You have given me faith in life and
Love  You have given me brand new eyes to
see the  world with.  As I lie here, looking at
you as you sleep so peaceful. I can feel my
heart soar, my love grow. I lean over
and whisper so softly in your ear
How much I love you

< !signature-->

~~Tara aka rp25  

[This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (edited 09-30-2000).]

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Ethan Halo
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1 posted 2000-09-29 07:55 PM


what a faboo love poem. great sentiments and warmth contained in your tear. well penned!
if i may be so bold as to suggest a title...
"a lovely tear"

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

rosepetals25
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2 posted 2000-09-29 07:58 PM


Ethan - Thank you for stopping by! I'm happy you stopped in    Thank you for your suggestion as well... I am soo bad at thinking of titles..hehe  
Severn
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3 posted 2000-09-29 08:32 PM


Ohhh..this is just beautiful...



Loved it - so gentle and sincere.

K

"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs


rosepetals25
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4 posted 2000-09-30 12:56 PM


Severn - Thank you so much I'm happy you enjoyed it.
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5 posted 2000-09-30 05:54 AM


What a wonderful sentiment you showed in this piece and I love the format as well.  You are getting to nothing short of amazing in your growth.  How about "Tear From The Heart"?
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6 posted 2000-09-30 08:00 AM


Lovely, nice to feel the happiness.
Catalinamoon

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7 posted 2000-09-30 11:21 AM


Mark - Thank you for the encouraging words.. and for the title!  I think that is the one thing, trying to find a title, that frustrates me most   If you don't mind.. I do believe I'm going to use your suggestion Thanks again.

catalinamoon -I'm happy to see you dropping in   Thank you for your nice reply



~~Tara aka rp25 :o)

Mark Bohannan
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8 posted 2000-09-30 12:42 PM


I would be nothing short of honored to have you use it.  Thank you much and now you for sure Know that I always come back and read the replies to my replies.LOL  BTW-how are the worm and tadpole doing?  Did you know that they passed your name on to some of their friends like the termite and the snail????  They say they feel left out and want you to write of them as well
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9 posted 2000-09-30 12:50 PM


Mark - ...A...termite..and .. a snail????  Um.. well.. ok.  ~blinks a few times~ And I thought the tadpole and worm thing was odd!  lolol. I will attempt..something?  
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10 posted 2000-09-30 03:31 PM



Great write, my friend.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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CocoBaci
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11 posted 2000-11-07 02:08 PM



Rose, this is so tender and the presentation just complimented the beauty you have weaved in expression...

I quietly sigh it's a beauty Rose!
Coco

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12 posted 2000-11-08 10:19 PM



Rosepetals25-
   wonderful write.  
   i like it lots.  

   -vicky





"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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13 posted 2000-11-08 10:21 PM


Great poem. The style fit it perfect.
PLY

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