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English Rose
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since 2000-08-20

Posts 211
Berkshire, England

0 posted 2000-09-29 07:30 PM

Autumn is come here

The sun turns a cold shoulder

Summer is done here

The seasons move on!

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

1 posted 2000-09-29 07:50 PM

a very simple verse...
or is there something between the lines? =)

very lovely sentiments. but if the sun turned its back, would we really call it a cold shoulder...

nice word play.

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

ggrn3
Member

since 2000-08-17

Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.

2 posted 2000-09-29 08:30 PM

English Rose
  This was a very simple verse.
  "The sun turns a cold shoulder."
  "Summer is done here"

It sounds like there is bad weather to come
Do we have anything to fear.

Simply terrific.

Garfield

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

3 posted 2000-09-30 08:02 AM

English Rose,
I liked the line about the sun turns cold shoulder, in fact I liked the whole concept of the world turning and the season's changing.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

English Rose
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since 2000-08-20

Posts 211
Berkshire, England

4 posted 2000-09-30 09:55 AM

Well Ethan...I guess you would if it is meant in the way that a person may shun someone or...give them the cold shoulder...by turning their back and ignoring them.

I think it is called poetic lisence isn't it?

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2000-09-30 10:06 AM

Nicely penned in so few words English Rose. I love the visual of the sun giving the cold shoulder ... excellent concept, well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

English Rose
Member

since 2000-08-20

Posts 211
Berkshire, England

6 posted 2000-09-30 10:13 AM

GGRN3....

Nothing to fear from me I can assure you
the future is looking rosey!!!

English Rose
Member

since 2000-08-20

Posts 211
Berkshire, England

7 posted 2000-09-30 01:28 PM

Thank you Kethry...I appreciate your thoughts.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2000-09-30 01:49 PM

EnglishRose~

The lament of a friend
as the season gets colder
I wrap a quilt
around your shoulder

To shelter you
within the warmth
of friendship's reason
draped across this changing season

Knowing full-well
that come the spring
I'll share in the flowering,
showering will bring

*Thank you for this little burst of inspiration, my friend.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

English Rose
Member

since 2000-08-20

Posts 211
Berkshire, England

9 posted 2000-09-30 06:27 PM

Thank you Kit for your kind words...I am glad you liked the piece.

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