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Fare Thee Well, M'friend
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Fare Thee Well, M'friend |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"Guess who died?" A stunning blast of words heard even in my sleep... and like a soldier hearing Revelry I flew into alert-- "Give me that." I snatched the paper from his hands... and he stood back, knowing that sometimes messengers are shot... I saw her face upon the page-- and confused familiarity... I read her name in disbelief over and over and over, How can this be? (how can this be...) She'd been dead almost a week. Her services were held private and discreet... her mother couldn't stand the sight of watching junkies weep when they never had before... "They should have cried, when she was alive..." embittered, she locked the door. So last time that I saw her face, was on the printed page... a guilty burden carried by the thoughtless part I played... And now I trace upon her face, a finger's memory... sick with the thought that she had bought a ticket meant for me. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
One way ticket I'd be glad I didn't take! Sad, but yet thankful in the end. Karen you've written this very well! Grabbed my attention and held me on the edge all the way through! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I am sorry for your loss of your friend and I would do anything I could to take your pain away. You have penned a tribute to her anyway in your words and just from penning from the heart you have assured that she will live eternally within your verse. HUGS TO YOU MY "Official" friend. {{{{HUGS}}}} |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Your talent amazes me sometimes. I'm so sorry about your friend, but glad that you are able to share this with us. We are richer for it. Thank you. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, Got chills just reading this. Powerful words there my friend. Sorry to hear about your friend. Great writing. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and he stood back, knowing that sometimes messengers are shot... I saw her face upon the page-- and confused familiarity... I read her name in disbelief over and over and over, How can this be? (how can this be...) She'd been dead almost a week. Her services were held private and discreet... her mother couldn't stand the sight of watching junkies weep when they never had before... "They should have cried, when she was alive..." embittered, she locked the door. So last time that I saw her face, was on the printed page... a guilty burden carried by the thoughtless part I played... And now I trace upon her face, a finger's memory... sick with the thought that she had bought a ticket meant for me. =================== Im so sorry baby .. I know this hurts ... you did her proud here... and nothing I can say can take away the pain of this loss.. but baby..ya know Im gonna fuss about that last line... not your ticket either ...and she wouldnt want the guilt for you ... your words do you both such justice I'll be in touch promise... LOVE YOU girlie me |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Serenity, you are some kind of woman to write this...I salute you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanking you all for this one feels weird to me...but I do want to let you all know that I appreciate your kindness---this place overwhelms me with the amount of genuine caring that shines through...for THAT I thank you all... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ *Hugs* for you in the loss. Friends are such a precious gifting - that we can't afford to lose even one without feeling a part of us stripped away. Loving you and sending prayerful thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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