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The Edge Of Goodbye
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The Edge Of Goodbye |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Now I never should have left you there Alone in that life with all its cares How could I say come go with me Lets let our love set us free When they need you As much as I do In different ways There everyday Now Im sitting on the edge of goodbye You've shut me out without a word That slamming door is all I heard And now all the should have beens The maybes and the could have beens Are lying in a broken dream Without a chance it would seem I just dont understand Please take my hand And bring me back from the edge of goodbye How can I just let you be When you are the whole world to me You're hurt I know thats so But it wasnt me who let you go Im standing here love in hand I offer it its all I can I promised it forevermore Until that day and not before Lets turn away from the edge of goodbye Dont throw away our starbright dream Because of misspoke words and thoughts unseen Ask me what I really meant If what you heard was the message I sent Dont run from love its such a gift Let faith be there and say what if Is life better without you there Please let me show you that I care Dont let this be the edge of goodbye [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 09-28-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tis a dangerous edge indeed and one hard to come back from. I hope he listens to you and is not as stubborn as some cowboys I know. You pour your heart out here and that is evident in each and every word. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Paula, this is very good, loved the words being on the edge of goodbye, sometimes love does conquer all. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Wonderfully well-written. I so enjoy reading you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
My twin... You may be sitting on the edge, but just behind you, holding onto you, are all your friends here at Passions...... I love the beautiful way you write with your heart......I love to read your thoughts....  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You are all too kind... Mark...yes cowboy I know how stubborn your heart can be...thats a might have been dream huh? It seems like this one is as well Rosebud...and sometimes it doesnt Marge...thank you dear lady for your kind and generous words Sunny my twin...you know...what more can I say? [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 09-28-2000).] |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow paula! The title is perfect and you express the pain so well here. It is so very hard when you're standing there on the edge, heart in hand, and it just doesn't seem to.......well you've already said it better than I could! Great writing!  "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula, you say it so well, heartache makes for great poetry in you. *HuGs* Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Paula these are beautiful words from your heart that express your feelings so well. I can feel your love and your caring.. You take care of that tender heart...James |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Eagleone...like I can write better than you yeah right...thank you my friend Kethry..love is no gaurantee against pain...even the best of lovers have misunderstandings...you just gotta keep trying James...thank you my good friend |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paula~ this is so painful and yet seems hopeful, I hope it works out...I'm rooting for you..... -SEA |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Paula - this is so sad... a lot of strength comes through in your writing amid the sadness though. Hugs K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Paula, What strong emotional writing. I wish you the best.. and I hope everything turns out ok. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Paula, my friend, you have penned a bittersweet one here... I've read this twice already and now it's three and still some ot the words expressed on screen run thru my mind endlessly... My sincere compliments for a well weaved rhyme! Coco |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
What an amazing flow on this one! i love it! the content is indeed bittersweet. a struggling theme to regain that balance. great job on this one. once again, the flow is just awesome!< !signature--> Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 09-30-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sea...thank you...please keep rooting Severn...sad yes...feeling a lot lost right now RP25...thank you my sweet friend Coco,,,to hold your mind through three readings is an amazung concept thank you and thank you for your kind thoughts Ethan...again I find you here with kind and gentle words for this tattered heart...thank you |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Paula, Oh my God, I'm almost crying right now. Your words so perfectly capture the fear of losing a love that you know your heart can't live without. And "the edge of goodbye" is such a powerful phrase. I'm going through a difficult time with a relationship right now and I am so afraid of losing her. Your words pack a potent punch and describe exactly what I am going through. I hope whoever he is reads this and gives your love the chance it so richly deserves. Thanks for a very well written and emotionally satisfying read. - Jeff |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jeff...thank you i think its too late for me...but I hope things go right for you |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Paula, It's NEVER too late. This is excellent, because as long as we are on the edge, we're still standing. Kathleen |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Paula, Looking through some of your poems I was taken by this particular one. Well done, giving up is hard to do, saying goodbye is never easy, when it could mean forever. Loved every word. At your best. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Irish Rose...its too late for me...too many lies and deceits to ever come back from...thanks tho Daniel...LOL well I thank you...I dont give up easy but sometimes you just have to |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
youve penned this heartache beautifully.... hugs, dg my soul is painted like the wings of butterflies...fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die...i can fly--my friends -Queen |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Paula~ ~HUGS~ so hard standing on the edge, the edge of goodbye...hope he hears your plea Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
its hard to be on the edge of a goodbye, but true love can be strong enough, to take you away from it.......hope that he will see how deep your love is for him. Hope that both of you can work it out...wish you strength. excellent work, have add him to my list. Charisma |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
OUCH! I felt this one, deeply...very well put Paula |
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