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AngelEyes
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since 2000-09-27
Posts 14
Wisconsin, US

0 posted 2000-09-27 05:24 PM



Tears fall from my face, as I whence out in pain
Stabbing like a knife, feeling alone and insane
Looking around the room, grasping for a breathe
I find noone, as I look into the eyes of death
What life holds for me, answers I try to find
I cannot see anything, I feel as though I'm blind
Trying so hard, not to fall in the hands of pity
The knife cuts deeper, losing my sanity
Falling to the floor, giving in to despair
My fate is sealed, I no longer care
Rock bottom is a hard, and lonely place to be
But every time I hit, a bright shining light I see
The answers come to me, they were not there before
Grabbing my hand, you pull me up from the floor
The pain begins to subside, I am not alone
You open your hand, and give me a stone
You were with me the whole time, body and soul
Consumed by the pain, my heart it stole
The pain I felt, all the time secluded
Thoughts of emptiness, my mind polluted

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Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-09-27 06:28 PM


I believe we have all been there once or twice and it is not a place of preference but sadly it IS a fact of life.  Wonderful penning from your quill.
Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
2 posted 2000-09-27 07:11 PM


"when this life makes you mad enough to kill;
that's rock bottom.
when you want somethin' bad enough to steal;
that's rock bottom.
when you feel like you've had it up to here
'cause you mad enough to scream but you sad enough to tear...
that's rock bottom."

a wise person once said, that if your already at the bottom of the barrel, there's only one place to go.

up

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

AngelEyes
Junior Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 14
Wisconsin, US
3 posted 2000-09-27 08:55 PM


Thank you Mark. You are so kind.
*smile*
I was afraid this poem might be too personal and loose readers in the depth.  They say we write our best at the most challenging time of our life. When the lessons are the hardest.

Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
4 posted 2000-09-27 11:30 PM


~AngelEyes
you speak with wisdom and truth. something about this piece draws me to it. perhaps its because it describes a part of human emotion with such depth and intensity. and no i didn't get lost lol. look forward to reading more of your work.
take care.
~amy~  

"The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences"

AngelEyes
Junior Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 14
Wisconsin, US
5 posted 2000-09-28 04:12 PM


Thank you so much Amy. It makes it all worthwhile to know you enjoyed it. *s*  I look forward to reading some of your work!
Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
6 posted 2000-09-28 09:47 PM


Angeleyes, things get us down sometimes and the pain is sometimes unbearable, and you convey this in your poem, this was very sad but so much emotion put into this.
Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
7 posted 2000-09-28 11:37 PM


Never too personal.  There are forums for just about every depth you could need and no matter what you pen you should ALWAYS be able to submit it in the proper one with the few exceptions mentioned in the rules before you signed on.  Came back just to read again and saw your reply so I thought I would respond.  It was even better the second time around so thank you for sharing it with us.
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