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suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


0 posted 09-26-2000 01:41 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Your smile was the axis
My world turned upon
But one day I blinked
And learned you were gone.
I gave you my heart
And endeavored to please.
Now the screams of "WHY?"
Drop me down to my knees.
Was I so awful?
Did beauty I lack?
What made you walk off
And never look back?
You made me feel special.
You called me your friend.
Did you mean a word
Or did you pretend?
Does it bother you
This pain that I feel?
I question my mind.
Was one moment real?
This incessant heartache
Makes me quite deranged.
I don't understand.
What happened? What changed?
Do you even remember?
Do my memories lie?
It gives me no comfort
Knowing I tried.
Were we doomed from the start?
Was I stupid to trust?
I believed in forever
Now my dreams are dust.
Could you tell me when
You made you decision
I was unworthy
Of all but derision?
Or do thoughts of me
Bother your mind?
Will I ever again
My sanity find?
Most times I wish
You'd just gone ahead
And ripped out my heart.
I'm the living dead.
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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


1 posted 09-26-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

First off welcome to Passions...the place where a million hugs are to be found.  Time in itself will heal and fianlly give the answers but it is the in between times that seem to stand still. LOVELY verse from you and look forward to your healing with us.
jlocke
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2 posted 09-26-2000 02:47 PM       View Profile for jlocke   Email jlocke   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jlocke

Welcome to Passions,

   Were we doomed from the start?
   Was I stupid to trust?
   I believed in forever
   Now my dreams are dust.

I'm sure we've all been there before.  As a pessimest I would say we're always doomed from the start.  But we can't let that idea stop us.  We must start.  We must always allow some degree of trust.  And if it doesn't work out, we will always have another dream.

I really loved your poem.  Please keep sharing more.  You won't be rejected here.



Love is the law, love under will.


JamesMichael
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3 posted 09-26-2000 03:13 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I am in the beginning stages of a relationship right now and it would hurt me very much if I was rejected because I am trying to trust and I am giving from my heart.  I know the hurt you are talking about when you say "Most times I wish you had just gone ahead and ripped out my heart."
Hope you are alright...Take care..James
serenity blaze
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4 posted 09-26-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Welcome to Passions, first of all...and I really liked this post...reminded me much of another memorable debut---"you oughtta know" by Alannis Morisette...well spoken, and to the point.
seraphin
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Posts 997
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5 posted 09-26-2000 03:26 PM       View Profile for seraphin   Email seraphin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for seraphin

The one line:

"Was I so awful"

Makes you catch your breath, for it is "the" question that haunts when find yourself alone. I really like this.
Dee
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since 08-19-2000
Posts 2361
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6 posted 09-26-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for Dee   Email Dee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dee

Welcome to Passions, reject. (it is going to be hard calling you that, as it is an insult where I am)
"Was I stupid to trust?"
Never! They were stupid to break that trust. If you do your best for someone and they walk away, it's their loss!
Take care and keep writing, it helps so much, and so do the people here.
Dee
suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


7 posted 09-27-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

A sincere thanks to each of you for reading, liking and extending a welcome.
Mark and jlocke - I'm not sure I believe in hugs or dreams anymore, but I appreciate your comments.
jmlee - I wish you luck. No one gives their love expecting things to end badly. If you see deterioration, you have a chance to make things right. But sometimes, even hindsight doesn't give any clues. I hope you're spared the experience.
serenity - That reminder is an incredible compliment. I don't deserve it, but I thank you for it.
seraphin - And no one answers the question, so it keeps haunting. Thank you.
Dee - It's not the identity I would have chosen, but it's what I am. Thank you for your welcome.
Kethry
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8 posted 09-28-2000 03:18 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Reject, welcome to passions. Excellent poem. Maybe we can help you change your name from reject to perfect.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-
Rosebud1229
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9 posted 09-29-2000 11:31 AM       View Profile for Rosebud1229   Email Rosebud1229   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosebud1229

reject, this is a very good poem, the flow of your words are exquisite as far as knowing sometimes we don't have the answer, sometimes we think we have the answers but love have a imagination much stronger than were prepared for at times,this is a awesome poem hope to read more and welcome!
jinxed
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10 posted 09-29-2000 02:52 PM       View Profile for jinxed   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jinxed

very good writing...how many of us have felt this.....you put it down on paper perfectly  
suthern
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11 posted 09-29-2000 06:01 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Kethry, Rosebud, and jinxed - Thank you very much for welcoming me and liking my poem.
A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart


12 posted 09-29-2000 06:59 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

I know the pain of loveing someone one minute, then they turn on you, deceive you, betray your love, rejecting every part of you, You ask yourself why? The answer...it is their problem...not yours, if you gave your best...it wasn't anything you did, or didn't do! anyway welcome to Passions!
rosepetals25
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13 posted 09-30-2000 12:06 PM       View Profile for rosepetals25   Email rosepetals25   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rosepetals25

reject,

   Hmmmm... I know I read this before and I thought I responded to it.. but it seems I didn't.... so I'm letting you know I enjoyed the read.  So honest and emotoinally revealing.. thank you for sharing.

~~Tara aka rp25 :o)
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14 posted 09-30-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Reject~

Your opening line was a beaut !

'Your smile was the axis
My world turned upon'


Welcome to Passions and wishing you another smile !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Alison
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15 posted 05-12-2009 01:22 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Ruth,

What a find - your first post in PiP.  I hope that you believe in hugs and dreams again - this was a heart-wrenching read and I think most of us have been down that road.  It hurts to read now years after you posted it - but I see the dreamer in you. Thank Goodness, you are here.  It would be an emptier place without you.

Alison
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Listening to every heart


16 posted 05-12-2009 08:23 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I'm glad Alison raised this back up to the top - I get to send you a Welcome to Passions email!

My gosh girl - you've come a long way!



" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


17 posted 05-12-2009 09:10 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

LOL... This is what I get for using an alias once upon a time... *G*

Thank you so much, lovely ladies... "suthern" has been around forever but "reject" was shortlived... glad you liked! *S*
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