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BirdeeB
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 106
USA

0 posted 2000-09-26 01:42 AM


I couldn't figure out a name so please, if ya don't like the name of it now, I am sorry..


I see your silent pain
I hear you hurt.
The candle burns
ever so slightly
against the agony
of the 3 words
that were said
to you.
Destiny has played with
your heart.
You tare your hands
away from your face
that last moment,
to see the sadness
that crossed those
Lonely eyes,
Fresh as a cutting knife in
my heart.
the dull glare of the sunset
reminds you of the
desperate
call.
Turn away the fear of
sinful pleas.
Stuck in your
darkness of
insecurties, like a
blanket wrapped an
infant.
Fall asleep my dear Love,
let the fairy maiden Kiss
your eye lids,
let her take away the pain.
Let the moon light pass through the window
of eternity.
DON'T
turn back.
Let those thousand
words slide off into an
era.....
Know you'll survive
Live through pain, strive past love and
Live on for ever....

© Copyright 2000 Brandi Butler - All Rights Reserved
Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

1 posted 2000-09-26 05:03 AM


A nicely written defiant poem....pain brings you strenth.......very nice.


jon

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
2 posted 2000-09-27 12:35 PM


Pain inflicted on the heart makes it exercise more and in doing so strengthens us in many ways.  It is not the preferred way to exercise but it does work.  NO PAIN NO GAIN as they say.  Wonderful write.
Sven
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since 1999-11-23
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3 posted 2000-09-27 06:23 PM


That which does not kill me Birdee. . .

Well done. . .

---------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


BirdeeB
Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106
USA
4 posted 2000-09-27 09:38 PM


Thanks for you comments~~ I appreciate them a lot.
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-09-27 09:51 PM


Powerfully written Birdee! What positive inspiration for one who needs strength and a lift up ... very nicely penned!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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