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The Justice Knife
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The Justice Knife |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Welcome, to “hello”, m’friends… Welcome, to my life… Welcome, sadly, words, ungladly— Double-edged— The Justice Knife. Forgive me now, my lamentations— Wordiness of incantations— Let me taste sweet breath of Love~~ Arise, Arise, Arose…above… the stench of limitations… A massive grave of sorrow’s rage… The golden road of good intentions… A quickened soul, to come of age, Arise, Arose, Above….Arisen. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
well written... had to read this one twice... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity- wow! this is really great.  I loveyour use of words here...such an awesome read. good job!!  -vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 09-26-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Serenity, I think you should consider submitting to the main site! Your work is so good! I love this one a lot.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
quote: arise my friend. . . your time has come. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Forgive me now, my lamentations— Wordiness of incantations— Let me taste sweet breath of Love~~ Arise, Arise, Arose…above… the stench of limitations… ========================== you just keep surpassing your self with each poem .. the uniqueness of style the vocabulary the depth ... if you keep this up someone gonna think your a poet *winkie winkie* very cool, cryptic poem here me sweet .. much like the poet love ya me twin me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mike--twice is nice...thanks.... vicky--thanks for reading, and hopefully I will have more time to check out your work as well... PdV---I just love when you pop in, you do say the nicest things, and I HAVE...just waiting to hear from God now...lol Sven--so glad that you enjoyed...I appreciate your kindness much. JM----you keep talkin' sweet to me like that and I'm gonna send you a bus ticket!!! Hugs m'girl...now I'm off to visit with my other family...LOL...ouch...love ya muchly. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Yeppers I would say that you are ....ya know that four letter word....NO NOT THAT ONE....the other one....yeah a "poet"....see I knew I would think of it...just don't push okay? Wonderful penning my friend. I am always happy to see one of yours come up. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
this was great girl! the style and content was awesome Keep writing I wanna see more ~Heather |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Absolutely incredible. I could read your work for hours. Very intense, yet lucid. Again, one of those "I wish I could write like that" things. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--this is very good writing, intense and powerful...I am very impressed!!!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Sista! Wow, how did I miss this? Fantastic work indeed, very intense and powerful! Loved it. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I definitely enjoyed this one. The last verse was a sort of coming-of-age. Mike |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
By the way, it just now occurred to me you actually wrote "coming of age" in the last verse. Somehow I passed over that -- but that shows you how much your poetry connects with me; even at times when I'm not paying as much attention as I should, I still get it. Great writing. Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Yeppers---I could tell--just by the "angel dander" alone---lovin' ya much me lovely! Heather--hell, I don't know where the first one hundred came from, lol....now I'm stressssed........ seraphin---you fit right in! Lovin' ya already! Maree------so glad you're home...missed ya, luv, HUGS. Martie....hugs to my Mistress of Imagery......you have taught me much, (I take notes, y'know...) Mike----TWO REPLIES? ME MUCH IMPRESSED. roflmao....now, if we can just get a conversation going......*wink* [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 09-27-2000).] |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Serenity, this is awesome. Everything about it was great. My morning is getting better and better. Juls |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Serenity - I'm glad you've submitted to the main site - I agree with PdV... This is great... You'll no doubt see your work there soon..  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ You be rocking with this one Little Miss ! It will be good to see you on the Main Site. Love ya' bunches and bunches. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
juls----thanks for reading, I know how time- consuming it can be, and if YOU don't, I'm sure my boyfriend would be happy to tell you all about it! (grins...) Nancy----thank you also---you make me wanna be a better poet! Hugs to you! Marge----missed ya much this morning, was much fun, glad you found the time to pop in! Let's get together for giggles real soon! Thanx to all! and now, back to our feature presentation... |
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